freestyle diss on empire check it out:

Empire your rap sound like shit I could strangle you with a strong wire/1
You think yer the man that’s on fire so sut yer mouth and chill cuz im like spider/.2
I could creep up form behind and take you out with my stong fist you outsider/3
You think you’re a straight up rider think again yer nottin but a none provider/.4
Take yer piece of shit rap out side rb cuz your nothing but a faker/5
So maybe later you’ll spit yer verse back at me and you better taker/.6
All as you think you are in the beat maker but I call you the beat breaker/7
So stop haten and stand up or yer done cuz you’se the hater/.8
Stop frontin and stop think yer the empire of this state/9
Or I will fuck you around and win this dabate/.10
Cuz yer the one whos allway late its all cuz of yer own fate/11
So ill tell you straight up now that you think youse the heavyweight/.12
Camp but yer no greater then the bomb detonator/13
That’s gonna go off in your house cuz its gonna be superior/.14

it was decent nice verse but cuda done better tho
punches were aiight decent lol

id rate it 4.5/10

not the best thing, could have been better, you say that you are 14, ya have too much fuckin hate in ya try an open mic without dissin people for a change

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i have lots of non disses no one posts in them

Yo Dawg Leave A Link To Were You Replied Before...... In Someones Elses Open Mic Or This Will Be Closed.

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umm this lacked punches flow and creativeness... everything was preety average i believe u could of done better but this was an ok-diss still non the less i seen way worse then this.... 5.5 outta 10

thanks 5.5 isnt bad for this song this one was one of my worst lol im gettin better lol i will be taken it to people in 1 year from now if i practice

Peep this dis to empire, n lay the feedback n ratin in the thread, peace..:

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=141949