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08-30-04, 11:52 AM
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Blue Eyelids, Opaque White Skin, And Dark Auburn Hair
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Closed blue eyelids, hands delicately folded towards her chest Hair loosely at her shoulders, as she tunnels through her solemn rest. Her body embraces the Lord’s presence; her tears are now all but dry She visions the past days, through the epicenter of her pupil’s eye. Silence soothes her world, as she is stationary in her existence Flashes of ‘The Temptation’ flood her soul, but she has the wrath of resistance. Her spiritual force blesses her world, and takes away actions of grieving As she’s been promised to Him eternally, her soul to a place of the undeceiving. Her skin opaque white, her lips crimson red, and her hair is the darkest auburn …As she lies there with her palms contented, with the grace of her Father’s coming return. Closed blue eyelids, hands delicately folded towards her chest As the child lies there in her in depth prayer, before her nightly rest
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08-30-04, 03:00 PM
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Light Weight
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IP:
are you pregnant or sometin???
allota emotion, you never post on this site alot, and you were right when peeps never respond to ya shit even tho its beautiful, your vocab seems ill and your delevery is great
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08-30-04, 04:16 PM
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Banned: Biting
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IP:
i loved everything about this poem....keep writing and ill keep readin
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08-31-04, 06:25 PM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP:
you have almost a classic way of writing, its beautiful, i love how your words have imagery, you can piece scenes together thatseem to flow, almost like a playwright does with plays, you are truly talented, nice work
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09-09-04, 09:51 PM
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I'm High.
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IP:
Interesting, this is a very good peice.
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09-12-04, 06:02 PM
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Back In Business
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IP:
heard a lot about you so i thought i'd check you out... definitely one of the top 3 poets on the site.... Fluidmoon, Ms.Skillz4daze, and you are my favorites so far... naturally, women are a lot more sensitive and emotional than men and the poetry reflects that.... there are some exceptions but you 3 are definitely all over it and got this poetry thing sewn up tight!... great drop... looking forward to seeing more of this visual type of poetry... one
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12-04-04, 06:03 PM
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cold cold, keep shaking
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IP:
That had a nice feel to it. You as well as your poems are beautiful.
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12-04-04, 08:27 PM
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^Hoodz Legend^
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IP:
^u revive old ass threadz ur a fuckin net lover of Idyllic Queen hop off her clit nigga
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