this bitch cannot be serious...

that was "serious shit" it clearly ripped me apart
made me shit my pants bitch... i didn't pass a fart
you need "elevation" and some serious "dedication"
ill be like martian luther king and say fuck this "nation"
i'm "unstoppable" now your gonna die of "probable" cause
he spits and then "pause" and wait for me to write my "clause"
What made you think you could ever step up to "teken."
don't think for a "second" that imma go easy, what do ya "rekon"
your like a pussy fart you get a wiff then fade away
i can out skill you in just about every way..............


it's over now dont come back get the fuck off this site yo...

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this had some nice rhymes. But I feel as if they were in the wrong place. Like certain line's you rhymed in the middle of the line. Then you showed the rhyme by using speech mark's. If your flowing nice and rhyme's are all in place. You dont have to use "speech" mark's.We will be able to tell were the rhyme's are.

This was good shit. Just had a bad structure.. pz

word @!