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09-27-04, 08:58 PM
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"On the other side" PoVerse-Scenario-RuffRyder
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Scenario's Verse ya know that i rap for the kids slanging crack on the corner and for the ones struggling all the time with they back to the corner coming from where i'm from it seems like a different prespective treated like shit at times and even worse sometimes neglected if u could only see what i've seen, what's made tears flow from my eyes tragic events hit hard, but like seas under the sunset i try to flow with the tide i may not have it as bad as others but i got it bad enough to wanna kill myself no one understands me at all, so no one notices or hears my squeals for help if u were only me then u would know last year was my year of hell or so i dubbed it that sept.30 rocked me to the core, it hit heavy, my baby girl gone now who's gonna rub my back i may not come from compton where niggaz let them 40. cals throw clips of slugz or from towns or cities where niggaz sell out and are quick to grip dubs i'm from the south originally but now i straight rep for the east i come from the slums, no nikes so i walk around with sketchers on my feet money never meant much back in the day, but i'm older so i need it to survive too many sins in my life, niggaz show me no respect, i diss em so they want me crucified seeing my father shoot him self left me lonely, it took a chunk of me and left me empty inside none of these niggas don't know what pain is, i stood there as the bullet entered his temple and want through his eye Iknow we all got our sob stories but my seems to be worse then others out here girls be having babies and babies, in other words giving births to mothers last years events cut my life open and left some open wounds niggaz out here dumb, they think they big cause they smoking shrooms i cherish life cause anyone could die from a stray slug or a broken womb people get mad when they secrets come out like ancient scrolls in an open tomb i try to think of it as my loved ones are on a trip but they'll be home soon steady perfecting my craft and trying to progress in skill peeps out here be over dosing on meds but where's the rest of the pills the streets of dover may not be as tough as west side or any other streets but just cause u got hot lyrics don't go thinking u above the beatin other words a gun and some dough don't put u above the streets Ruff Ryder's Verse On the otherside, the other side of the wall All it is here is cops, parties, and the worst of um' all You know um', the quick money makers stackin money tall This cities crawlin and callin for everyones murder call Yea a drug bust cuz of rat n' then a 187 People dyin, do they get sent up to heaven? Who knows in this city people call Crackron You know what i'm talkin about, a city in Ohio called Akron Some know it for the home of Lebron James But the city's so bad now, just 'bout goin up in flames With nothin the same and people dyin in this dirty game This a place where you don't seek fortune or fame But a city that's goin up in saw dust Thug's on the street and killers only known for flawless All-this is is a death trap for you and ya money With cops stalkin ya leavin little hints like the easter bunny It aint funny, i just caught a felony five All because a friend who wants a risky life And on top of that my uncle catchin felonies every which way Cops blamin him for drugs he never touched in the first place And in worst ways he's now catchin a worse case In his birth place, all he can do is go by his church ways My family has only had cursed births At a young age we'll all be ridin in a hearse In a city that's not worth livin in I deal with it by just never givin in In a life like this, in a grim place Full of nothin but shaddow pointin in ya face All you're doin is havin a race with death That's what it's like on the other side of this city...whats left ProVerse's Verse i'm from this side.... you see the good side of the city... theres suits free food and everlasting buildings... but I'm from the part where you spot blodd stained hands causing summer boys to wear mittens to cover stitching where they consider 7 lottery dollars winnnings because compared to nothin that 7 dollars is plenty causes some triggered shame in me... I look up and pray for the family that aint with me the fear of the hell visit because of all of there sinning even when white people say nigga it no longer offend me because ina way ignorants is in us and it aint friendly it causes situations that penetraits the hasings we not aware of the pain we cause...we spacing... we're arked in the boks as bad we can't erase it even if we changed we can't reerange our faces but... the way... we stay and the way we pray... with so much passion becuase we fear the day... even though we change when we make it a phrase we pretend its all good...we keep a happy face but the boddled up depression only disfigures our pase we try to lose the anger but it follows the trace and get us arrested and fills our eyes wiht mase makes us fill unwanted but still we claim the place we deail with hate we can't escape and girls getting raped give us a chance....then we can advance... don't judge us by our stance and the length of our pants you cannot blaim us for behaving so hanus you tossed us here..left us for dead..this is how you made us don't play us we all one nigga we take no favorites watch how this bad side look good we Senario, Ruff, Pro all on tv and are famous.... peace
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09-27-04, 09:05 PM
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..:Merking Mc's:..
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don't mind my structure people, it got fucked up during the copy and paste
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09-27-04, 09:29 PM
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waddup besides the structure which confused the fuck outta me but i get it now it was real good n real n im sorry i kno what its like to have people close to u kill emself but i've never seen it...u mus be strong to deal wit that keep it up homie!!..but besides that it's hot
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   waddup gangsta!?!?! R.I.P. Isaiah Ryder 7/11/82 - 2/26/04 tell all my people i'm a Ridah nobody cries when we die we outlaws let me ride until I get free I live my life in tha fast lane got police chasen me-Tupac |
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09-27-04, 09:57 PM
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I have a lot to learn...
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quick: dopeness... was feelin it... hard to read with that structure mess but i got it.. madd content n good word choice.. hope shit gets better for ya with our rec. deal... you deserve it
 ruff: above average... good content. some of the rhymes u used were a little basic but the feeling was there. pro: yours was a lil hard to understand.. had to read it twice.. but it was good. good flow, good content.. maybe different word choice would make it easier to read. one
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09-27-04, 10:19 PM
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Detrimental Thoughts
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thanx ofr hte feedback.....this shit is hot.....man.....well scenario i'm sorry about all that shit in ya life.......keep ya head up, hold ya chest out and stay strong....you've done a good job so far.....nice verse pro......man this shit is hot....maybe his might go in for best open mic
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09-27-04, 11:14 PM
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IP:
yea i was tight aint it
*not surprised yawn* lol peace
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09-28-04, 10:53 AM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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wow, you all did a great job with this drop, i was feelin all of your verses, you guys did a great job with making this readable and flow together, nice vocabulary and emotional content, very strong subject,, i liked this a lot, great job........pc
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09-28-04, 04:06 PM
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Detrimental Thoughts
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IP:
come on....more feed back....this shit was fuckin tight as hell...well more feedback please
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09-28-04, 04:26 PM
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..:Merking Mc's:..
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uppin for more feedback, check out my corrected structure of my verse first then read this, we'll return honest feedback
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09-29-04, 09:00 PM
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Detrimental Thoughts
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IP:
uppin for some feedback....come on.....i'll return the favour.....or we all will....come on....uppin for feedback
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09-29-04, 09:52 PM
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~Whos Next?~
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ayo that shit was hardcore all the way around... very good drop yall..
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10-01-04, 09:16 PM
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"Ill Emcee"
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I like it.... that was awseome!!... Ruff ridah.. i like your verse!!!.... that was awsome... I like the way you worded everything ... It was tight... ProVerse and Scenerios, verses... you guys were awsome ...
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10-02-04, 10:52 PM
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23-7, 16 Knockouts
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that verse was da shit. it was good, yall niggaz did good. good structure, good flow, and great vocab. hit me up anyday to do a collabo
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10-03-04, 12:03 PM
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Bonecrushing Nigga
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nice kinda good shit... yea the struct got messed.. i wouldnt say its dope though .. this wasnt ya best peice though .. i qwould say shoulder weight was .. but this was good i was feeling ya verse and it matches ta title
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10-03-04, 12:16 PM
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..:Merking Mc's:..
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uppin for more feedback peeps
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