Me and Jamel went out for a minuite
When that terrorist shit happend, he was all in it
He was in reserve for the army
he said no matter what happend he would always be there for me
Everyday was misery
Waiting for that call
My misery ended on October 24th
He called me and said "please meet me in the park,
I got somethin to tell you, be there before dark."
I met him there and i couldnt help but cry,
he held my hands and looked me right in my eyes
He told me that he loved me
and that nothing would change
but we both knew that things would neva eva be the same
jamel went away
But like he promised i got letters everyday
I love you, I miss you
These words repeated in each letter
With promises of us being forever bein together
Reading his letters always made me smile
I got worried when i didnt hear from him for a while.
His mom called me on a beautiful sunny day
and told me that a bullet took my baby's life away
I couldnt believe the day i feared had come
You dont know shit about pain, until youve lost someone you love.

Very good. Very deep, if inconsistent. I really got into it near the end, and it ended a bit abrubtly. I liked a lot, though. Write more; you have talent.

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