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Old 10-22-04, 11:35 AM   #1
Loveliss Grandz
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From: BrOOklyN,N.Y.
i'm lookin' for trouble.

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on microphones i'm trouble some
like forest gump wit a double pump
niccas get popped like bubble gum
when i leave em' slumpt,i crumble chumps
if rap was atest
i'd pass leavin' you fukaz double flunkt
and i'm sick of these cats wit da artificial intelligence
dat shits irrelevant
they should of learned dat from da president
ya'll past being bird ass nicca's so i label em' pelicans
and wait for dey talk cause i surely got some hell to bring
ain't gone stop til' they flock off and ain't gon' b no settl-ing
my shines 24 karats your's -the temporary bling from them metal rings
you can dis my shit 100 hundred times and i'll still b hotter than them
projected little metal things
and nicca's listen,God gave you a brain so use it
come at me hard-you must got a thing for losin'
and i welcome all challengers
to get layed down by a style equal to ninez equipt with infra-red&silencers
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I'm like CHUCKy dyin' to live in the flesh free of the BATTERY,
ASSAULT n ROBBERY rapidly,wishin' cupid would clap at me
N lift this evil spell so I can experience happilly evil backwards-see(down there)
EVIL............backwards =............LIVE

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Old 10-22-04, 12:29 PM   #2
Loveliss Grandz
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feedback.....someone.......anyone.
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I'm like CHUCKy dyin' to live in the flesh free of the BATTERY,
ASSAULT n ROBBERY rapidly,wishin' cupid would clap at me
N lift this evil spell so I can experience happilly evil backwards-see(down there)
EVIL............backwards =............LIVE
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Old 10-22-04, 12:43 PM   #3
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Kind of basic ryme scheme.

Good lines and good flow to this,

I just feel if your gonna diss and drop punches, do it consitently

my shines 24 karats your's -the temporary bling from them metal rings
only line i thought was wack.....

You got skills and will fit in here in no time
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Old 10-22-04, 01:22 PM   #4
Loveliss Grandz
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thanx 4 the feed back.

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understood.i felt that line was kind of lame too afta i read it back.i chose not to change it just out of the lack of fearing gettin dissed i guess.
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I'm like CHUCKy dyin' to live in the flesh free of the BATTERY,
ASSAULT n ROBBERY rapidly,wishin' cupid would clap at me
N lift this evil spell so I can experience happilly evil backwards-see(down there)
EVIL............backwards =............LIVE
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