Those Three Words
Tainted

-1st Verse-
Pen on the paper as my optics lock on your position,
Smooth skin, delicate curves, a pure definition,
Of beauty, including a smile to light up a room,
Feminine features which blossom and bloom.
I don’t tell my friends to avoid an argument,
About your facial features that I’m in luv with.
And then I try to put an impression on you,
A few jokes, a stern glare or my intellectual
Side, keeping my masculine pride,
Refusing to ask for you hand, the apple of my eye.
Don’t know why I’m I crazy about you suddenly,
When before I looked at you with an interest, but normally.
I sense some intimate tension between you and I,
Your blurred image turned into a sumptuous visage.
Can’t put my puzzle emotions into a collage,
but I can promise this, you will be mine.

::Chorus::
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-2nd Verse-
Think back to that moment in time,
When we were dancin’ real close, my soul visible through your eyes.
Time had slowed, my new found love in her prime,
I suddenly felt as if keeping my secret was a crime,
Your shapely figure so close to mine.
Longing to whisper in your ear, those three words,
As my fingers slid down those delicate curves.
More than ever, at that moment, I wanted you.
Right then and there, I knew it was true,
That I had to tell you how I feel about you,
I can not make the same mistake that I made in the past,
Which was letting the girl of my dreams slip right from my grasp,
So I’ll win over your heart and soul,
Such a passionate life and future we will hold,
A beautiful love for you can unfold.

Chorus


I need feedback on this one. I'm still thinking of a chorus, and I may add another verse. Maybe a possible collabo with a female artist.

needs work enuff said. return da favor in my battles.

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yo...this was actually pretty good...wasnt expectin this...no hate...you got some nice shit homie...some bars were a little short, but it was nice...Ill be waiting to see what it looks like with a chorus and another verse, so keep me posted...nice shit dawg...1

Thanks Magik. Keep the feedback comin' please.

yeah it was good. LOL al ready left mines. but i can see you making something better.
yo blackmajik get @ me with that vote.

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