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Old 11-26-04, 06:00 PM   #1
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then and now

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1900

..peace was tranquial,a beast would thankyou for lending a hand..
..money wasnt a thing,no big deal,your not spending a grand
..man made machine's are yet to be created..
..never ever a time we done somthing we hated..
..thing's seemed calm and collective,only nature to battle..
..green surrounding's,living off the land,can you picture the cattle..
..we survived by doing thing's for ourself's,no machine's to use..
..good old home brew,is the only thing fien's abuse..
..drug's were not an issue,no such thing's as prescription's..
..police were normal citizen's,no such thing as conviction's..
..struggle's arent here,because money is not needed..
..we selling weat for meat,we love to meet and greet..
..no such thing's as land dispute's,no goverment or a tribunal..
..no tear's, just smile's and joy,even at a guy's funeral..
..we sort out problem's in a family council setting..
..everything we done we enjoy,never left sitting back and regreting..
..we dont work a nine to five for a boss at a minimal cost..
but we do work to stay safe,otherwise family is lost
..but we love all and help one another out..
..no problem's when we come to a river,just find another route..



2000

..war is at it's peak,and the beast is in command..
..money is the major issue,considered poor if you only got a grand..
..everything is machine's and artificial intelligance..
..at time's we do thing's,that seem like we gave hell a glance...
..fake media is what the goverment televised..
..we try surviving,but each time we put in effort,hell will rise..
..crack head's are converting our children into fiend's..
..being prescribed medicine,with a name we dont what it mean's..
..police are out of control with all there brutality..
corner drug pusher's end being another fatality
no one seem's happey,more tear's than smile's and joy
thing's are crazy,cant understand why pedphile's deploy
problem's arent sorted,just aborted to be locked up
continuislly regreting our action's,hating that we fucked up
working for minimal wage,it's a subliminal way
of course we have love, but forced to put it aside
when we come to a river,we just turn our back's and hide.

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Old 11-26-04, 06:04 PM   #2
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yo man, deep, like da way u did that, a theme or like idea wwhich ppl aint gone 4 yet get me......keep dat shit comin du...Peace
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Old 11-26-04, 06:31 PM   #3
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werd...shit is deep for real, creative, and both tie in with each other i really enjoyed this piece...keep bringin more this was really tight

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Old 11-26-04, 06:49 PM   #4
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thnx for the feed,link me if you want it returned.
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Old 11-26-04, 07:02 PM   #5
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this was a dope drop...stucture feel off a bit but it still flowed well...keep droped this had vocabulary good...and good emotion keep it..peace..8/10
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Old 11-26-04, 07:38 PM   #6
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GJ man..glad you Council..tight reppin there..

Flow was good..strcture was iight..but the overall drop was tight..

8/10..1st solo I seen from yo I think
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Old 11-26-04, 08:27 PM   #7
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Nice drop man I like the way you used the two diffrent years,,.
the 2nd verse was deeper coz we can both relate to that.

Had good use of vocab wordplaybut the flow was missing in places, altogether a pretty decent.

Nice one

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Old 11-26-04, 09:06 PM   #8
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..war is at it's peak,and the beast is in command..
..money is the major issue,considered poor if you only got a grand..
..everything is machine's and artificial intelligance..
..at time's we do thing's,that seem like we gave hell a glance...
..fake media is what the goverment televised..
..we try surviving,but each time we put in effort,hell will rise..
..crack head's are converting our children into fiend's..
..being prescribed medicine,with a name we dont what it mean's..
..police are out of control with all there brutality..
corner drug pusher's end being another fatality
no one seem's happey,more tear's than smile's and joy
thing's are crazy,cant understand why pedphile's deploy
problem's arent sorted,just aborted to be locked up
continuislly regreting our action's,hating that we fucked up
working for minimal wage,it's a subliminal way
of course we have love, but forced to put it aside
when we come to a river,we just turn our back's and hide.

^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ THATS MY FAV VERSE RIGHT THURR U FITED EMOTIONS AND CREATIVITY IT WAS REALLY DEEP SHIT FAM...........NICE 9/10 DA STRUTURE IT WAS AN LIL BIT CHOPPY BUT DA FLOW IT POPPED UP GOOD........VOCAB WHICH IS DA DIZZAM.........NICE MAYNE GOOD DROP
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Old 11-26-04, 09:14 PM   #9
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nice shit dude, shit really has changed in america since 1900. even though shit aint really never been right to begin with in this country. but nice drop nigga, i really liked the flow, it kept going through out the whole thing, nice shit
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Old 11-26-04, 10:39 PM   #10
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Quote:
Originally Posted by fi-del
1900

..peace was tranquial,a beast would thankyou for lending a hand..
..money wasnt a thing,no big deal,your not spending a grand
..man made machine's are yet to be created..
..never ever a time we done somthing we hated..
..thing's seemed calm and collective,only nature to battle..
..green surrounding's,living off the land,can you picture the cattle..
..we survived by doing thing's for ourself's,no machine's to use..
..good old home brew,is the only thing fien's abuse..
..drug's were not an issue,no such thing's as prescription's..
..police were normal citizen's,no such thing as conviction's..
..struggle's arent here,because money is not needed..
..we selling weat for meat,we love to meet and greet..
..no such thing's as land dispute's,no goverment or a tribunal..
..no tear's, just smile's and joy,even at a guy's funeral..
..we sort out problem's in a family council setting..
..everything we done we enjoy,never left sitting back and regreting..
..we dont work a nine to five for a boss at a minimal cost..
but we do work to stay safe,otherwise family is lost
..but we love all and help one another out..
..no problem's when we come to a river,just find another route..



2000

..war is at it's peak,and the beast is in command..
..money is the major issue,considered poor if you only got a grand..
..everything is machine's and artificial intelligance..
..at time's we do thing's,that seem like we gave hell a glance...
..fake media is what the goverment televised..
..we try surviving,but each time we put in effort,hell will rise..
..crack head's are converting our children into fiend's..
..being prescribed medicine,with a name we dont what it mean's..
..police are out of control with all there brutality..
corner drug pusher's end being another fatality
no one seem's happey,more tear's than smile's and joy
thing's are crazy,cant understand why pedphile's deploy
problem's arent sorted,just aborted to be locked up
continuislly regreting our action's,hating that we fucked up
working for minimal wage,it's a subliminal way
of course we have love, but forced to put it aside
when we come to a river,we just turn our back's and hide.


Damn "fi-del", you did it again, I honestly cannot wait for your audio.
I cant believe this is gettin slept on, prolly cos of ppl like me, who eitehr come in and drop fake feed just to please someone, or jsut elave it alltogether, Nah man, but theres only a few open mics I will actually sit down and read, And this was definetly one of them, When I get my own label, I'm signin you. I liked the way, you structured both, roughly the same by bars, I dunno whether I was the only one that noticed 'Fien' in the 8th bar twice. But serious man, this was dope, if you correct up a coulpe spelling mistakes,

Definetly one of the best open mics out here.
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Old 11-27-04, 01:39 AM   #11
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yo dats hot rite there, i like dat, good original topic, nice wordplay
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Old 11-27-04, 01:42 AM   #12
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thnx for the feed distilled,hoe.
Thank's to all the other feed also.
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Old 11-27-04, 01:43 AM   #13
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That Was Nice.. Mad Props To Ya.. keep Up The Flames.
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Old 11-27-04, 01:47 AM   #14
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Thnx for the feed,
distilled I just relised you commented on the 8th bar"fien's"
If you relate each bar they are spose to be a comparison.

For instance the fien's bar in 1900 is showing how there is no drug addict,but in 2000 there is.
feel me? Not sure if that's what your getting at.

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Old 11-27-04, 02:03 AM   #15
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shit was pretty nice structure was good flow and scheme were decent

everything is machine's and artificial intelligance..
..at time's we do thing's,that seem like we gave hell a glance...
..fake media is what the goverment televised..
..we try surviving,but each time we put in effort,hell will rise
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