I know I'm wack so give me some tips




I can lyrically piece graffiti along tha streets of each city//
Envision mentally and suspend the imminent development and the motions of seedlings,
Swimming around in my ovaries a whole new generation of mini me's
Breath holding contest against that only competition which is me
I defeat infinity ,

I'm a cancer patient that has asthma and with every breath I delete a century
Depetin that O (ozone layer) of tha globe enviromentally
Leavin ya heart skippin beats repeatedly with out tha inner me that' sadly and praticallyempty
attackin me is graphically ne as tha actual blasphemous spirit that my subconscious indecisively sliced from me physically to divide tha right energy preventin' Christ from his intervening intentions that futuristically sighted my injuries that was inevitably ment within a minute at least
I'm fighting me mentally
no fixin my teeth bitin u dentally
my brainwaves surfs tha earth's waves as my mind enters that sea adventurously
mighty is what I was sent sent to be colliding with the veil providing energy
Only I would be deciding to put an end to me
me disguising on halloween is hiding tha enemy or is it ?
It's inviting tha enemy
higly pricing essentials that are vital tha image that you highly regard and are wrongly guided by, but nowandays in society seems right is unstrikingly and unsuprisingly ideal but only striking itself so I srike wit stronger electricity , Ive already elected my ministry to do my sinsiterbiding of administering that riding of idiocy but hey it's only me

that was good i like it keep um comin.

Not bad, keep spittin

aiight.. work on it..

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Not what im used to...But i still thought it was coo...Kinda seem more like a poem to me...Jus me...100

UPPIN THIS I LIKE IT ALOT

I liked this a lot, the flow was nice and the knowledge was well developed, had some wordplay and was quite hard hitting... The flow was sturdy, multies and some internal rhymes made it nice... The wordplay was always working, there were some nice similes in there and it come strong throughout, with good technique and lines... Vocab didnt seem to be a problem either, some decent words used... It was a solid piece, I would suggest spit something with substance that might elevate you, mos def got potential though... Keep spitting and elevating...

Peez...