Nigga...

Yo, I'm :explodin: with flavor while I'm 'flyin' on da mic!/
Got Mc's faces :implodin: cuz Im a 'bird' of prey that just took :flight:,/
:Syken: out you playas :tryin: to :develop: in the :game:,/
Dont go :cryin: to you mommas while I :envelop: yo :fame:/
It's all the :same: bitches say I'll never :change:,/
I'm stayin 'E-Z' while I 'FLOWZ' leavin otha niggas :Slain:/
:Slang:, badda :bang:, Cap showerin the :lame: and feeble of mind/
Such :sublime: Lyrics shouldn't be unleashed at this :time:,/
Squrrily :fuckers: comin at me actin like I wont 'hit' :hard:,/
I 'punch' :suckers: in 'lines' KOin better then when Ali :Sparred:,/
Spit, :spat:, watch as I :smack: the pretence of :facts:/
I'm crazy enough to make 'Suge' :crap: his : pants:/
Show his women Im her true 'Knight',/
Beaten the shit outta nigga's at friday night fights./

Shit.. now i confused my self o well... tell if u like it or not?

yo i liked this nice drop!

keep it coming!

thanks for the feedback playa.
^^^ yaw!

shit you showed no skill here it probably took you an hour to write this

nah boy, twas freestyle. and dun freetype in my thread wit yo shit mayne bug it!

i'll do what i want......until i get banned lol.....i thought we were battling what you a punk??

Aint a bad piece, there were some nice things about it... The concept was a bit boring and over played with the flow having no substance... Your style is quite nice, a lot of internal rhymes and long multies which gave you a lot of rhythm, you should take away the ":" though, it would be easier to read without em... The wordplay coulda been deeper, more punches in this piece and it woulda been stronger, I noticed some similes, wordplay is important and it lacced... Vocab was aight, quite simplistic, need to improve that aswell... Otherwise its a good effort, you mos def got potential, jus keep spitting, try spitting under concept... Elevate through it...

Peez...

aight thanks fo the feedback