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12-14-04, 03:58 PM
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My lifes in shambles.......
IP:
this was in a battle but it got cancelled so jus want some feedback now i guess...
peace in the beginning lifes like a meaning thats a cherished spectacle any incidents related to the youth is purely coincidental nothin to worry about not greed or useless shit that glistens no wife cryin as she sees her husband shipped off to prison happy children watching t.v. and rustling outdoors is heard police teams burst through the door, kids shocked and disturbed imagine wakin up everyday to see grey,chipped and peeling walls paint growing old but the rusty bars left standing strong and tall maybe im jus growing clostrophobic darkness encloses my mind nomore freedoms proposed ive been slowly dragged into crime nomore prized foods or possesions i took all of it for granted now im approved as a criminal and im a danger to the masses like all of a sudden that was my tactic and i did it all on purpose .....viewed as the enemy im not liked and my life seems worthless now i consume nasty drinks and cold meats, grilled off the street 95 degrees workin crazy looks like a concentration camp to me how can this be allowed, its not safe, none of this is my fault this is the life they gave me, lived off the rules i been taught i wish i was still in old times, situations were always fixed when calling names was just laughed at, and was merely a diss times have changed life is worse shit happens to good souls now life is like a fantasy were merely playing actors roles this has been been told already but unfortunately nobody listens ive been through it all and wish i could start from the beginning but i cant my life is done its been cemented into the ground lost any riches its like animals being sent off to the impound so dont look into the future so much stay wit wat u can handle or you can turn into a paper entitled "My lifes in shambles"
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12-14-04, 04:54 PM
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IP:
uppin dont sleep.......
peace
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12-14-04, 04:58 PM
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I walk & walk over you
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IP:
Ok Nice Creativity.....good Flow.....nice Vocab........nice Imaginary.....i Sense Meta'z In There Too.....either Way It Was An Good Verse......emotions Was Fully Expressed In This Piece......
Put An Feedback In My Open Mic "freestyle#2( Breaking Out) The Link Is In The Sig Peace
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12-14-04, 05:57 PM
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IP:
aight thanks for the feed ill hit up yours later
uppin.......
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12-14-04, 09:59 PM
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IP:
uppin............
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12-15-04, 02:31 PM
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IP:
uppin............
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12-15-04, 02:54 PM
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IP:
very nice... not much I can say about that but nice work.
9/10
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12-15-04, 06:20 PM
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IP:
thanks
uppin..
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12-18-04, 05:58 PM
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IP:
uppin............
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