I’m On A Political ‘Platform’ Meaning My Views Are ‘Raised’
I Don’t Usually Act Norm Because I’m Use To Rage
Life Is Like Vehicles, If You Have The ‘Will’ (Wheel) To Go On You Reach Higher Elevation
‘Steer’ Clear Of Appalling Topics Because Conversation Passes Through Interesting Locations
But Through The Cracks Showcasing Light I See The Brutal Fights
I Know That War Is About Who Is ‘Left’ And Not About Who Is ‘Right’
Lord Knows I’m Taking A ‘New Direction’ In Life But It Could The Wrong Turn
I Try To Strive For Perfection, If Not That Wrong Turn Could Make This Song Burn
Its Said That Ones Life Is ‘Ripened’ Green With Experiences
So I’m Highly Mature Besides My Black Means And Appearances

Getting slept on eh...

Can you say slept on?...



zzzzz zzz zzz zz

meh, nuttin special homie - but good nonetheless
structture: ok but fell off in places
flow: gd
lyrics:gd
wordplay:gd

overall - 7/10

return favour on ma battle wit realistik or 1mic<------
Peace

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Some advice: When someone is trying to read your piece, it is much more fluent when you type it normally.

Ex. Xxxxx xxxx xxx xxx
You= Xxx Xxx Xxx "Xxx' 'xxx'

It makes it look odd, and can get kind of confusing.
Also some advice would be to keep it fluent and on topic.

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...054#post1820054

If you could I'd really appreciate it, it's one of the om's I dropped.

^okay but not great......6.5/10

lookin at the title thought it wouldve been betta..just elevate a lil.......~1~

fix structure but the first 4 lines werepretty good

well metas wurr nice..ha..structure wasn't bad *IN MY EYES* though the flow has seen *BETTER DAYZ*...word...

7/10 PimpThugALicious

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