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12-15-04, 05:05 PM
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Saving Sacred Sex-u-ality
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I feel tiny hairs off my arm lift up while yours shift along my hips Our love’s a natural benefit, not too long until my eye lids’ll squint My calm nerves lit, my voice-holder tempt to expand it’s diameter These cheeks mounted to the deep and soothing voice I have heard Telling me to just relax on the comforter, I wanted you… it’s clear I brought your face near mine, slanted gently so I can taste your ear No fear exists, you lift my ivory lingerie swaying with the ceiling fan I can feel my thighs releasing tension from the palms of your hand I reminisce on the tub full of bubbles and smooth massages with oils And begin to realize how you are loyal, and treated me like your royal So I can sacrifice my body for the moment, unplug the alarm clocks Once this has started, I wouldn’t dare you to take extra time to stop We’re tangled in knots, already, it seems I won’t speak in full words I shout in nouns, “baby, I…” every time you knock against my vault My pant brought the question, “Did I hurt you, baby, sorry my fault… I Love You”- three meaningful words, my soul will float and get lost Yet, it returns to me not even exhausted but worth an infinite cost I welcomed you to stir up my soul, you thank me for calming yours Can’t afford to leave, this ring opened doors only you can explore.. ~I’m glad you waiting for me~ To: my love of my life.. I.W.
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12-15-04, 08:22 PM
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IP:
Do you know how many kids that have seen your pic are now going to whack off to this? Lmao...
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12-15-04, 09:12 PM
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lol.......... thanx fa the feedback, uppppiiiiiiiiiiiiiinnnnnnnnnnn.............
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12-16-04, 01:40 AM
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12-16-04, 02:41 AM
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IP:
DAYUM!
Imagery and shall I say.........."feeling" throught he whole thing was great. I know what you're talking about too which is dope. Just overall a great poem I think, I don't usually ever look at poetry or even topicals but I gotta say this was dope fo sho. We should hook up for a "collab" sometime.  9.4/10
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12-16-04, 02:52 AM
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~Break Bred or Play Dead~
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IP:
thats how my baby girl do.......and thats real
perfect shit .....Nuff Said...
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12-16-04, 02:22 PM
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IP:
.......thanx fa the feedback peoplez...
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12-16-04, 09:54 PM
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tha tightest thang in RV since Hang-man's rope*cough pussy hole*
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damn gurl. i been readin some of ya poetry and dats some deep shit. u got skillz ma. keep doin wut u do shawdy.
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12-16-04, 11:15 PM
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IP:
aight...all i gotta say is dis shit was nice...some ol freaky type shit...lol...it was a deep poem...type of shit u had to open up to or whateva...
good shit
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12-16-04, 11:42 PM
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IP:
^thanx mucho for the feedbacko.....
 naw, thank you, everybody............... for the 40 views and the written feedback i appreciated it much..... 
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12-17-04, 02:55 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP:
dat shits freeky as fuck but nice drop fiya!
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12-17-04, 05:51 AM
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Back In Business
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IP:
Nice lil piece fiya... i'll holla at ya in the forum next chance i get .... (almost home!!!!)
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12-17-04, 06:31 PM
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IP:
^^ayo thanx everybody for the feedback........................ much respect.. very appreciated.. welcome gramma long time no hear from ya....
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12-17-04, 08:57 PM
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IP:
good shit ma, and thanx 4 ur feedback in mine!!
First off, i love your imagery, it was like i was there with u, that important to tha reader!!! It reminds me of my first...but that was a long time agao and going off topic, anyways u blew me away again!!! This is why i love reading your shit so much!!! ~Much Luv~
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12-20-04, 12:28 PM
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Still Spectacular, Yes!
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IP:
nice shit girl..
9.5/10 very "emotional" mmight i say...imagery whas fantastic of course cuz eryone got the picture lol...nice choice of words...nice piece...
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