He is the magnificent sun that brightens my day/
She is the dark cloud that hides it away/

He is the one who brings me happiness and with him i'll always want to stay/
She is the one who brings me down and with her i'll always have a cause for dismay/

He is my angel sent down from heaven/
She is my demon who keeps me locked up in her dungeon/

She is the one who makes me feel like im in my own grave-forever there i will be/
He is the one who brings me hope that one day i'll be set free/

It's like he is the good and she is the bad/
But somehow they agree the way the Hatter is Mad/

But even so, no one will ever understand/
The power and greatness of my love for him/

So as its been said before, i'll say it again: love conquers all things/
And in my case that is exactly why the caged bird sings/


yo, please tell me wut ya think. i havent written in awhile

Hey Gyrl..
I thought this was a very tight piece..
I didnt fully understand the verse as a whole..the guy being the good and the girl being the bad..but their love conquering all...i guess its all in how you look at it..I thought it was really well written,nonetheless...I see you got lots of talent to be expressed n ill keep an eye out for more of it in the forums...feelin this...peace.

thanx. yea it iz a lil confusin cuz my best friend (thundathighz) didnt exactly undastand it but ima leave it like dat. thanx fa tha luv. one

thanx fa tha luv.

one

Yo ma u no i always got to give u some love. this shyt was hott. keep postin da real. 1luv peace

"So as its been said before, i'll say it again: love conquers all things/
And in my case that is exactly why the caged bird sings/"

best bars from ya verse ma.. ..overall this was good, couldn've been expressed better but this was good none tha less.. ..keep writin mi'ja


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yrp hayley its kinda hard to follow i had to read some lines over and i still didn't fully get it but it is a nice piece

Troy

intriguing and deep piece...what i got out of it was...that your inner self, ridden with ghosts and demons of the the past and present...is the one that keeps bringing you down...while the man is the one you love...who brings happiness and content into your life...but at the end of the day..your love for him, and his love for you...shines through all the darkness..

So as its been said before, i'll say it again: love conquers all things/
And in my case that is exactly why the caged bird sings/

^^^those were great lines...epitomised the piece for me...you are caged within this other person....the darker side of you....but with the strength of love, still you sing....

..well thats what i got from it...along those lines anyway....might be different....but it hit real hard and deep...in a way it touched a nerve...that may be why i got that meaning....but its all good...

great piece....respect...

ive got to agree with everything that varentao said... the lines and everythin.... i loved it personally... thought the flow was aweosme and the emotions were strong, deep, and tru... keep it flowin

But somehow they agree the way the Hatter is Mad/
That's my fav line boo but you knew that already... I love ya ish, even if I neva fully grasp this whole she thang, (I think I got it now Holmes)lol. I want ya to know keep on singin, caged bird!! Peace (pizzle) lol

i liked this peice, really appreciate it. cause i think it shows true appreciation for your one and only. and i think thats a true thing. mad respect and appreciation on this peice. really felt the imagery specially when it came to the demons and angels and dungeons, was lovin that. either way stay up and forever be evolvin foe the better. peace.
joey

not bad..not bad at all.....all tha peeps who said it had good flow....?WRONG!!! no offense....but i think they don't have tha slightest clue how bout how this written flowed...to be honest it was "choppy" in sum parts.....i couldn't really "grasp" tha concept easily.....keep ya head up n' u'll get better PIZZLE

ohhh....Sis Dun take my Word!!!!

He is my angel sent down from heaven/
She is my demon who keeps me locked up in her dungeon/
^ Fav lines ...

I was feelin dis whole thing,
i could understand it all too,
and i could relate ...

Much props ..

Pz
~1~