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Old 07-15-02, 01:42 AM   #1
LaDy TrInItY
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Jealousy

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My heart frozen where it is, not beatin, not movin.//
I see everyone around me, and I cry.//
Cry because I'll never be as beautiful, never skinny, never talented.//
Is it jealousy, or is it pitty, the feeling of all my insecurities.//
There balled up, as i am on the freezing floor, shivering.//
But is the floor really cold, or is it just my body.//
Shuting out everything else, intaking only my monsterous thoughts.//
Blinding me of the reality around my senses.//
The mirror in front of me, all it shows is the mess.//
The mess of my life, when it should be so "perfect".//
Forget the mirror, let it fall to the floor in a million pieces like I am.//
Let it feel pain, but it cannot only I can.//
Can i fall to the floor in a million pieces, to let everything scatter.//
Scatter out of my life, out of everythin, to where i am a worthless being.//
That time is close, and then there will be no more cryin on the floor.//
No more tears being spilt, because I will be gone.//
No more mourning, because there will be none at all.//
No more me, because I am not here at all.//
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Old 07-15-02, 01:59 AM   #2
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whutup with all the sad down type poems.. don't ya'll people have happy lives!? lol....

this was nice..... a more straight forward poem.. but it's nice.. instead of all that complicated bullshit poems we see
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Old 07-15-02, 02:01 AM   #3
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um theres stuff like insite....read deeper in the poem....but i guess i'mma have to explain this poem to
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Old 07-15-02, 02:08 AM   #4
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Good Stiff , Girl ! I Definately Enjoyed Reading This Piece , I Can Tell That You Are A True Poet , I'm Sure You Know What I Mean By That , Nonetheless , I Feel That This Came From Your Heart , You Express Yourself Well , I Look Forward To Reading More From You . . . . .

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Old 07-15-02, 02:18 AM   #5
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this was nice in wordplay. it flowed real well. stayed on topic and all around good peice. hadeverything, just wish itwas an happier peice.

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Old 07-15-02, 02:25 AM   #6
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YO BABY....THIS WAS TIGHT
REALLY.....
I CAN PICTURE SOMETHIN LIKE THIS BEING READ TO A CROWD...
"The mirror in front of me, all it shows is the mess.//
The mess of my life, when it should be so "perfect".//
Forget the mirror, let it fall to the floor in a million pieces like I am.//
Let it feel pain, but it cannot only I can.//"

THOSE WERE MY FAVORITE LINES
VERY NICE

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Old 07-15-02, 02:30 AM   #7
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not all poetry is to be happy..some of it..its just to let ya feeligs out...or past feelings out..or to portray a feeling of darkness..etc...much luv..God bless...1

p.s. and i already got yelled at for this piece..my baby said he dont want me writtin pieces like this
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Old 07-15-02, 06:57 PM   #8
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aight..fuck this shit..ya'll bogus...uppin for the damn sleepers....fuck it
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Old 07-15-02, 07:06 PM   #9
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kinda sad but uhhh good
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Old 07-15-02, 07:34 PM   #10
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once again dis PAPISWIFEY...yo- im agreeing wit e'ery1 else. dis piece was tight. and it does seem like u write a lot of sad stuff sumtimes but dats cool, dats u and ur good at it so keep it up! respect

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Old 07-15-02, 10:50 PM   #11
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AAH!!!! SIS, DAT WAS ILL! IT WAS DEEP! FAREAL, REMEMBER WHEN YOU THOUGHT I COULD WRIGHT POEM BETTER THAN YOU????? WELL I DON'T THINK THAT'S EVEN POSSIBLE ANYMORE! YOU GOT WAY MORE POETIC-NESS THAN ME AND MORE THAN I COULD EVER GET. YOU'RE A PURE TALENTED PERSON, AND DON'T EVER PUT YOURSELF DOWN! YOU GONNA MAKE IT! LOVE,
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Old 07-15-02, 11:58 PM   #12
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Well..

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Dis was interesting. I guess you just gotta stop thinking negatively all the time. Cuz not only r u hurting urself but u're hurting everyone around you. Think on that. Holla.
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Old 07-16-02, 12:47 AM   #13
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forreal u makin me sad spittin sad poems

but i love readin your stuff

so keep it comin

HOLLA
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Old 07-16-02, 01:54 AM   #14
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haha..ya'll sound like my boyfriend.."dont be writtin iish like that" haha....sorry ya'll didn't know it made you that upset..much luv..God bless..1..
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Old 07-16-02, 01:52 PM   #15
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another nice drop mama keep dropping
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