I was created befor all forms of human or molecule life/
Needed companionship so God tore out my ribs and molded a mic/
The Big Bang Occured when I first spit a verse and destroyed half the earth/
This led to the lord creating more from the dirt/
Together we battled to the inch of death till It hurt/
Life times passed and I was still one wit the mic/
I finally saw my enemies when god blessed me wit light/
In 200B.C. I travled acrossed seas to see MC's Bleed to acheive success/
But either way, none were blessed wit the breath needed to spit bars to the death/
I destroyed lands across the 5th Hemisphere till there were Only 4 of em left/
Brong stress to the chest of gods enemies, and erased them from the map/
Then I was crowned the Back into the Arch Bishupsy of Rap/

God bless my creative ass. sorry if its a lil boring though, I must have forgot to give a fuck some were a long the line. Oh well

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figure I could drop by and promote my my first mixtape and what not since im here..

Id really like some feed back for this shit, i just rered it and it was actually good ass fuck, I liked cus it was creatve, so could get some feed back on it.

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figure I could drop by and promote my my first mixtape and what not since im here..

The Big Bang Occured when I first spit a verse and destroyed half the earth

^Packed too many big words in there and it threw off the flow....

But either way, none were blessed wit the breath needed to spit bars to the death

^this had a good flow...kinda..Nice wording

Like you noticed some lines were a lil too long...BUT.. this was a good piece..
I did sutn like this a while ago.. But this was tight....
More wordplay and you would've had me hooked to it..
Keep up tho... 1

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thanks young. i wrote that shit a long time ago and I just re read it. I dont really like it much though.

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figure I could drop by and promote my my first mixtape and what not since im here..

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