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Old 02-03-05, 12:47 PM   #1
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T-Dot - Sick (Open Mic)

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I wrote this song when I wanted my ex-girlfriend back.

Im only hearing No, still waiting for the answer Yes
Waitin on the day you appear in my room n undress
Adress this issue... Im sick of crying in a tissue
Sick of stayin' up all night tellin' myself I miss you
I try to diss you, writin raps to get you off my mind
But somehow you seem to appear in every other line
Must be a sign, what the hell is god tryna tell me
That she loves me, Nah "I hate you" is what she tells me
Puts a magic spell on me, but she doesnt even try
Sick of askin' why, sick of havin' to resort back to ry
Sick of sayin' Im sick of you in every fuckin' line
Sick of you playin' headgames every fuckin' time
Sick of you actin' like a slut when ya walk in a club
Sick of all this crazy talk bout me havin' to quit drugs
I'd rather spit slugs send about three to her head
Inmature bitch surprised she dont pee in her bed
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Old 02-03-05, 01:06 PM   #2
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um...its cool...7/10...only cuz im familiar to dis topic oh to well...so im not surprised...good wordplay though fam...return tha fava...link in sig...stay up
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Old 02-05-05, 08:22 PM   #3
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thx for the feedback, I will be sure to hit yours on. UPPIN for some more feedback!
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Old 02-05-05, 08:40 PM   #4
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cool cool u coulda made it a lil' longer but i guess it's fine the way it is 6.5/10 check mine out and leave feedback "Complicated Freestyle"
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Old 02-05-05, 11:37 PM   #5
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Its Okay. 5/10

You Need More Complexity and Vocab Patawan.
Elevate.
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Old 02-05-05, 11:40 PM   #6
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you look like a bitch wit this whole shit and it was weak i think
no hate but fuck that slut who gives a fuck
mad pussy out there
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Old 02-09-05, 08:19 AM   #7
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Old 02-09-05, 08:33 AM   #8
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Naw dude, this isnt too good.. Your rhymes were simplistic... Your flow was locked, and you had a structure goin. You need to improve more bigger words, and alittle bit longer of a open mic. Na mean? 6/10
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Old 02-09-05, 08:46 AM   #9
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Alright yeah pretty decent verse but vocab isn't really needed in poety^

Nice simple style pretty good flow all round decent verse,..

Stay up

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Old 02-09-05, 09:17 AM   #10
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its aight could of been a lil longer
could of been more complexed and broadened ur range of vocab
still an aight drop
i wolud give it 7/10
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Old 02-09-05, 09:18 AM   #11
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can u return the favor on my battle
vs. dev
link in sig thx
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Old 02-09-05, 11:25 AM   #12
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feelin this....... not a bad flow,, got meanin........... 8.......if dis is real, allow dat hoe.......carry on rappin
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Old 02-11-05, 09:27 AM   #13
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thx for the feedback, UPPIN for more
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Old 02-16-05, 01:25 PM   #14
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BumP bUMp!!!!!!!!!!!
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Old 02-16-05, 01:48 PM   #15
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thta flow is hot..................nice.....keep doing ya thang............
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