Here's my first drop ever, so don't judge so harshly, just say what I gotta elevate on. It's called "This World Order."

This World Order

Every morning I get up to the sound of death,
To cliques of G's sellin' a pound of meth,
And even though I'm coppin' up new kicks, I'm still trippin',
Life's gettin even more tirin', as I be sittin',
Knowin' behind every tree lies bodies rot an' decayed,
Not understandin' why everyone is bein' hated,
Over reasons that should not be debated,
While our brother and sisters are overseas,
Fightin', just so we can have a chance to breathe,
As we just throw life away so irrationally,
If death is life's only concept,
Then humanity just took a step back,
And so many wrongdoings got me thinking,
That we need to gain back the love we lack,
As the world turns, and the day grows older,
I'm just prayin' for this cold world order.



Oh, here's the link.....
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post1965491

EDIT:sorry...typo.

pretty good for a first drop homie- nice shit.... 7.5/10....

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^Ready Fo That War....

"All This Gang Talk, Makes Me Wanna Choke You Red, Black And Blue"- Aimz

Dade County, 3-0-5
M-I-A 4 LiFe

Thanks, uppin for more feedback.

i was feelin that shit
pretty good
i like the flow
and i liked the vocab
good drop
ill give it 8/10
return tha favor
link in sig
thx

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Not understandin' why everyone is bein' hated,
Over reasons that should not be debated,

i liked that line
The rest was dope also
good vocab and stayed on the subject
overall it was pretty tight keep it up

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