Show me what you fuckers got cuase this is my intro
To hit hoes break bones vicisious with this flow
To just know how much skill appeal you workin with
To be really honest bitch you workin with nothing sick
You spittin like fuckin kids so let me switch flip the script
To let you all understand i've grown, learn to do it big
To spew it like venom i'm poisnous with these ryhmes
Like acid touchin your skin to burn by ending this line
With something feelin so rite not matter if i am high
I like to hurt these fuckin skirts cause i ain't rite in my mind
And oh god and oh my i'm callin jesus my homie christ
So feel the wrath of heaven when i spit and take all your lives
So what i can i say i'm done short but it was fun
This the fuckin blow off to fuck yall up like yall some cunt

It was okay

the flow was a little choopy here n there, soime decent vocab in places too
Lines were a lil inconsistent, but it was alright for a freestyle...

Just improve ya punches an flow, but it was decent for what is proably your frist rhymes on this site

Keep elevating an return the feed on my open mic called Look Mom

Thanx
Peace

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You had a good structure in this, but the flow was kind of chopped up in places. Your vocabulary was allright. Just elevate on making your verses flow better and you should be good. Good drop for just comming to the site. 7/10.

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^ Please leave feed on my open mic.

flow and multis was good punches could be better here but were nicely worded this was a enjoyable listen struture made it ez to read i liked it overalll pretty dope for a newb defintaly

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