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JailBait By: Indeph & Wet Willy
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Alright Wet Willy's lines are Bolded and Italicized.. this is OM of Feb.. we did it in Cypher.. hope ur feeling it.. pz....
21 year old brother...at a high school...Homie picking up friends of his cousin.. one of them, he catch sight to, hoping she must of flunked ,or something... She Licking Her thick Lips.. got dark hair flowin down to her shoulders.. Is She in High School.. with that short skirt.. she lookin a couple years older I guess there goes my morals, her skirts expanding real tight.. my little cousin is a freshman...they can have senior friends right? Well regardless she hops in the back seat.. and pulls back her hair.. And I take a glance in my mirror.. her legs open.. and im gasping for air.. then she looks into the mirror, now she's aware that I've been watchin.. I didn't look away, as I stare and our eyes continue to lock in.. Stomach’s rumblin so we stop to just grab a quick bite to eat.. We playing footsie’s under the table.. but we keepin it to discrete I look down.....as I see cleavage leavin and peakin out her bra... I get nervous till I noticed her twisting her tongue around the straw I reached for her hand,and my cuz said what the hell you aren't dating.. and I replied, nah I'm just admiring the girl arm bracelet.. so the lie really worked, though I hate for my cousin to made a fool ....So it was time to leave, but both our plates was full.. Im’a bout to drop my cuz and her off.. cause its on the same route.. But the girl suddenly stops me.. and says she wants to hang out.. for a minute,when we stopped,I was having second and third thoughts.. I looked down, I looked back,And saw that her skirt's off.. O damn.. it’s the moment of truth. And I can feel my heart racin.. So I put the moves on her.. and take advantage of the situation.. the action slowly gets more intense.. the car starts heating.. next thing you know all you can hear is the shocks start squeeking there's heavy breathing...lound screamin..my heart beatin.. at a fast rate..since I hear the sirens of the cops screechin' She starts screaming “RAPE” damn.. this girls a slut by far.. Then I heard those deadly words…”get outta the car”
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We mixed up eachothers lines on some.But still Tight shit we did.
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yeah dis is hot...hit home cuz its tha reason one of my cuzzos is in jail...dis dat deal...BOTH OF YALL NEED TO CHECK OUT MY NEW OM...link in sig...
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Uppin Dis ShizNit
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Up-Ping........
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Tony Green thinks this is fire great drop . Yall both did yall thang. On some gangsta shit this is hot.
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IP:
iiight thanks upping...!
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Odi et Amo
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IP:
Definately feeling this one, you both have a nice writing style which go good together in fact. It's easy to read and to follow because you kept the vocab quite simple (certainly not a bad thing because high vocab sometimes kills the content).
In the beginning, I didn't really know what the piece had to do with the title 'cause I guessed it was gonna be another random love drop. Stayed that way until 4 last lines when you finally see the connection with the title. I absolutely love the ending, structure is good for sure. Emotion was there, you guys described everything with such a sense of reality. Progression of story was dope as well Gotta give you props for this one! Tight piece! DQ
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Pretty dope peice, Indeph came real hard......
Willy, you was neither here or there, a little inconsistent, but Indeph saved you an came raw as fuck on this peice Whole structure n scheme was dope, it was a real nice peice, good lookin out 8.5/10, keep 'em comin'
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IP:
this was a pretty good piece here double W...& Indeph shit the flow was good vocab was aight and the structure was okay, but overall nice drop...
7.5/10
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errpin..........
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upping.................
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Ike
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IP:
yea this was a dope story....i thought both wet willy and indeph came pretty hard on this one...consistency by both in my opinion...vocab was decent...structure was decent...but the story line was good as hell...i really enjoyed reading this......dope drop
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...OUTSTANDING...
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This peice was a knock, I was cracking up on a few lines cause i been in that bad situation thank god i have morals lol...Good structure nicely thought out and writen nice vocab.....NICE A-
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unknown legend...
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ya I enjoyed reading it all the way through...good drop...it was a nice collab...the ending really said it all..nice concept...
oh yeah..return the favour
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