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Old 02-27-05, 08:27 PM   #1
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Two songs-One a Diss, the other is off the top

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http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/determindmusic.htm

let me get some sort of feedback to the forum host here is my two links to where I checked out and gave feedback, but I am goin to give more, so check my stuff out and leave yours so I can check yours out and I will, you can hit my website too

www.rhymerelated.com we are looking for people to put on a mixtape so submit song there or here and if I like it I will hit you up

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post1989432

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post1989480
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Old 02-27-05, 09:34 PM   #2
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aight listening to the diss...not feeling the beat....flow needs work...fell off in spots...you dont sound to confident on the mic yamean...delivery needs some work...lyrics were not to hard hitting yamean...overall i'm not really feeling this to much...


aight the free beat is pretty good...flow needs work on this one too fam...off and on beat...in sound like you kinda everywhere with it...delivery a lil better than in the diss but still needs some polishing...i'm not really feeling this free to much fam...lyrics were better than the first joint tho. keep doing ya thing tho aight elevation is coming
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Old 02-28-05, 03:56 PM   #3
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aight listening to the diss...not feeling the beat....flow needs work...fell off in spots...you dont sound to confident on the mic yamean...delivery needs some work...lyrics were not to hard hitting yamean...overall i'm not really feeling this to much...


aight the free beat is pretty good...flow needs work on this one too fam...off and on beat...in sound like you kinda everywhere with it...delivery a lil better than in the diss but still needs some polishing...i'm not really feeling this free to much fam...lyrics were better than the first joint tho. keep doing ya thing tho aight elevation is coming



it's no point of me telling u something over and over again u digg..so basically this is something along the lines i would have said peace stay up and keep elevating
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Old 02-28-05, 02:42 AM   #4
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Thanks for peeping it, I appreciate all the feedback since I am a producer, I am still trying to find my right voice behind the mic. Any suggestions? thanks for the reply though, I need the criticism, thanks
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Old 02-28-05, 03:58 AM   #5
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you need alot more emotion...and that battle was wack....it was all selfglorification...work on your pucnhlines and metaphores then after that work on staying on beat,,,..so write more then get back to rapping....crawl before you can walk
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Old 02-28-05, 08:19 AM   #6
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Aiight first one -- You sound like your trynna be quiet.. Dont be scared to get loud on the mic a little.. Cause people who rap quiet kinda sound bitch.. I hope your not facing anyone hard cause youd be pretty easy to out-class on that battle.. Just a heads up..

Second one -- Its not bad, beats hot.. Sounds like some mid to late 90's type beat.. I love that shit.. Your flows slightly better on this track, but you still sound a bit whimpy on the mic.. Some people can carry it, some people cant.. Well see how your style develops around it.

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Old 02-28-05, 02:31 PM   #7
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ok thanks for the feedback, im goin try and post another song tonite, thanks for all the notes, peace
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