Yo, all i can do now is elevate my game//
its not for the money the bitches the cars or fame//
Im climbin to the top of the highest mountain//
Hurdlin over obstacles showin those who doubtin//
aquiring this game comes with struggle and pain//
doin everything right, while using the left brain//
retain yourself as an individual//
dont be like everyone else, its the "golden Rule"//
tool yourself to do the best you can//
and thats how it all began//
one man, tellin the world is plan//


first one...dont hate just reply on how i did and what i need to do better.........

Peace

^Uppin^

aight kid whats poppin keepin it reel wit ya no hate it was basic and simple and to short try usin more comples rhymes and words nuthin to big ya know just make it more of a rap then a story or poem it wasok for your first one i guess but niggas and bitches and whitboys on here can be harsh and ruthless as shit so just keep dat in mind aight holla................