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03-15-05, 04:58 AM
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Happy Birthday
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happy birthday 17 years ago, on this day to be exact, a princess was born She would have perfect hair, pretty eyes and a beautiful form Her life would be difficult, but the outcome would be bliss The obstacles would be impossible but she defeated every risk She would meet a person that would change her life forever Destined to be together, they shined threw any weather The times would grow ruff, but the love kept them bright Cupid kept them strong but god helped threw the fights Days would slip away, then weeks, then months would pass by Our relationship would almost end so right now I ask why The present is in the past but the future is in your hands Your destiny is manifest so pursue with all plans Forever and a day I promise to adore you thru all the hard times So I ask you this, can your heart always be mines? But before you answer there is something I must first say Shea Flores I love you always and happy birthday its her birthday, LOL  Short,Sweet~dope piece..Featured for a week~FLUID Last edited by fluidmoon : 03-28-05 at 08:44 PM. |
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03-15-05, 05:16 AM
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Gods Of War! -yeah im one
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this was dopeness. Obviously heart-felt. Nice poetry.
I dont no why for some reason its easier wen writing poetry to write about women and wen rapping its difficult to rap about women in my opinion. But then poetry was invented to get in girls panties i think. Nice one bro, all else aside, good workl
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03-15-05, 11:13 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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yeah i agree wit dex 150% it was invented 4 that reason alone but neway structure was on point...very direct & very nicely done...vocab was well done overall i'll give it 10/10 & Happy Birthday 2 ya girl ya dig
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03-15-05, 04:52 PM
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COUGH HALL OF FAME cough cough* uppin this shit
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03-16-05, 02:30 AM
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IP:
uuuuuuuuuuuuupppppppppppiiiiiiiiiiiiinnnnnnnnnnnnn nnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn
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03-16-05, 08:40 PM
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*cough cough*...you gave it away at the end....*cough cough* ohh wop...lol....still cant stop saying that..haha...pz bro...1
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03-16-05, 09:20 PM
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in your system
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cough....cough..........CREATIVITIE.....cough...co ugh.........and dont deny it, because you wrote another poem for and used it as a link in your battle against flow intelligent......NO MORE DENYING IT, proof right here
 ^ poem is nice by the way
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03-16-05, 09:32 PM
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He's Not Creativitie...seriouly...prophysics Is My Alias..haha...coz I Know I Fucked A Girl Named Shea Not To Long Ago...lol.....j/p Bro....but Nah He Aint Creativitie...
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03-17-05, 06:10 AM
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03-18-05, 06:03 PM
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Odi et Amo
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Awwwww, this was so sweet. I wish someone would write that for me
 You had good strong emotion, concept wasn't nothing special but bet she was very happy with this Was a nice read because it was spitting straight from the core and I always love reading that!Good going! DQ
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03-19-05, 06:35 PM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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i liked this, it was short,sweet,and to the point..simple yet, well put..keep dropping.1
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03-22-05, 05:27 AM
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ok thanks....................................
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