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04-13-05, 12:02 PM
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.Breathe Easy.
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.Breathe Easy.
. . . . . A Gentle Walk ... We First Met Under The Sun Yet Met Through My Eyes Many A Day Before The Day Was Perfect .. As If The Daisys, Grass And The Sunny Sky Were Seen Through A De Vinnics Eye The Gentle Heat Playing Among Our Temples As Her Beauty Played As If A Rabbit Yet She Lay Still As The Time It Seemed, Dreamlike, As She Lay Property On My Time Forever .Breath. A Light Jog ... The Blue Sky Above, The Symphony Of The Wild To A Timeless Conductor Playing To The Beat Of My Heart, Only One Could Have And Play Thy Instrument As She Stepped Into View It Seemed Timeless As Our First Greeting As Her Beauty Was Fused With My Heart The Words Of A Simple Question Escaped And Hushed The Orchestra Among Us And This Moment Lay Property On My Time Forever .Breaths. A Downhill Run ... A Moonlight Sanctum And A New Orchestra Of The Night Each Word Skipping The Beat Of The Drums And Tune Of The Wild My Thoughts And Her Thoughts Intertwined And Interlocked Forever As Her Beauty And Being Lay Property On My Heart Soul And Timeless Future Forever .Sigh Of Relief. If You Respond To Mine Leave A Link To Whatever And Ill Respond
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04-13-05, 01:03 PM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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This was good man, your vocab was nice here,some simple concepts,but the way you spoke them, it all came together and flowed very well, keep it up.1
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04-13-05, 07:44 PM
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Thnx For The Feedback .. thats what i was actually going for .. Thnx Uppin!
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05-03-05, 10:29 PM
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Uppin This Shizzle For A Couple More Posts...
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05-05-05, 01:09 PM
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in your system
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nice poem man....i liked the title, because it reflected the poem a whole bunch.....the suttleness was key, which really made this effective....i thought anyways....def a good poem, keep up
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