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04-18-05, 04:31 PM
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Sunlight Fades
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There comes a time in a mans life when he loses sight of what's right Starts fights and doesnt finish them knows his rights but cant distinguish them Then he's alone at home hearing a constant drone of the telephone thinking of himself never worthy some days I wish youd take the time to observe me while I take this life step by step inch by inch minuet by minuet take a step in to my shoes man I dont even know where to begin it so take a look at my life through a different set of eyes no longer a look of despise but now a look of pity and distress looking over the madness how can it finally be put to rest sunlight fades week by week day by day with a blink of the eyes your life is slipping away so cherish the moment as long as you can cause youll never understand the corruption of man ahh and then I lost train of though.. lol feedback please.
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04-18-05, 04:37 PM
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word...it was pretty dope......rhyme scheme i thought coulda been better, better structured too, but still, it was good.....ending was good....last couple bars then the chorus (or whatever).......i enjoyed it
while I take this life step by step inch by inch minuet by minuet take a step in to my shoes man I dont even know where to begin it ^ yes to that......aight, keep up....ps, can you check out mine 
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04-18-05, 04:43 PM
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Haha, thanks for feedback Kesse, just was thinkin for a lil bit, startin typin, took a break, and what do you know, I forgot all my thoughts so thats why its so short. Bumpin
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04-18-05, 08:48 PM
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Bump bump bump, bump, bump bump bump bump bump bump bump bump bump.
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