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04-25-05, 03:50 PM
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Eternity, the concept of something everlasting without change... A contrast to evolution of human life, a simple diverse range… More than one instance, like a ripple on a calm waters surface… They oscillate outwards at constant speed, a simple grace… A simple reaction could come from any kind of catalyst… Like a decision in life, may seem small at first, clouded in mist… But in time the decision could have a larger impact on someone’s life… Saying no to a fight could simply instigate a continual fright… The consequences of decisions decided in an instant… Is it really choice or is planned out, through life ever constant?.. Inter-dimensional calculations come from options which we chose… The difference between one and the other is that in one, you lose… It sends a shiver down my spine every time I try to find… An answer to the question of who I am and why I don't mind… When people confront me with a front intimidating, I freeze… Do I chose or is it written? The answer is the cure to this disease… Why me? Some say I'm nice, but others have a different opinion… Not as easy to take but it's accepted, like fate, there's no option… An insane insomniac contemplating through times of sleep… How? why? who? and when do these things happen? It's deep… Why do people creep to make others weep, whine and cry… I'm sure things could easily turn around if we could only try…
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04-27-05, 09:02 PM
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IP:
feedback?
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04-28-05, 03:05 PM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP:
Good piece, i liked your vocabulary and the flow of this poem as well, the concept is creative, seemed to have a good rhyme scheme as well, keep dropping man..1
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05-08-05, 04:32 PM
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IP:
Thanks for the feedback.
appreciate it. =: () )
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