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04-25-05, 04:06 PM
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Light Weight
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Quick Keystyle
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Lyrical hustler, I set a flow to this beat// I'll make you shocked so bad it make you jump right out ya seat// I find it easy to defeat sleek meek dick headed bitches that greasy// I hustle hard an all I hear from them is that you beat me// I teach these, kids around here how to rhyme// Set shit up so simple it got you blowin out ya mind// I think that you gone find, this long battle is hectic// I'd tackle you in inches, but you ain't even metric// I set shit, ablaze all the way from top to bottom// I set the roof on fire, they’ve still got people in there but fuck 'em// I lost my girl to this shit, she just didn't understand// Pimped the bitch so hard, the knuckles were fallin from my hand// Fuck this shit, its over before its finished// My rap shit jus started, but I done already feel diminished//
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 I couldn't resist any longer  (Thanks for the feedback lol)Quote:
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04-25-05, 05:36 PM
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a.k.a prozak
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ehhhhh...this shit was aight too....it flowed will and rhymed but the rhymin was too simple and basic and for how basic the words were it made the lines seem more stretched than they really are....yo i could tell u this was fire but im tellin u what i truly think and my 1st impression of the shit i read...u had it kinda too short but it was a keystyle so u could get away with that..u got a lil more complex with the last two lines of ur keystyle...which i liked but u gotta fit as much complex words in here that u can...the more complex the better...5.5/10 keep it up, you'll get better..trust me holmes
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