A little somethin I wrote in my RB days..


An age where darkness ruled...sinister with commotion
Thousands of bodies were left ministered in the ocean
Showing no notion of love... nor any signs of respect
Cloaks torn by bones, leaving blood stains on the neck
Of a hectic maniac, a man who had power over seas
Believed to be seen... only bringing men to their knees
A mutiny had arisen, his power grew to a sinister stage
Caged by his own ambition - thrown to a watery grave
Some say: he went insane before hitting the corel floor
Core strength was flooded - captain caught in a moral war
Fourteen hundred other soldiers, hands on their swords
Swore to protect their crew.. fighting amoungst hoards
More men were established as brave, they became feared
And they were tossed to the ocean, not tasting the tears
Of the family that abandoned them - it's happening today
Some say: Bush is brave. But we'll find out another way.
He'll become feared, there will be a mutiny truely, i sigh it
But if the ocean breathes salty....George Bush is a pirate.

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2110741
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2110749

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haha, this was cool......good relation and nice fuckin' flow yo, haha, overall, it was a great piece, vivid imagery, not too much emotion though, i thought, but still a kick ass piece........OG'S.....YAY!

keep up

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up.........................

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upping for feed

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upping for feedback because mothercfuckersss sleeep

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probably shouldnt up this after so long, but eh
but thanks to mr bones, appreciated

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this was a hellaz tight ryme 8/10 nice flow r u makin fun of gwb or is a pirate a good thing cuz we wnt to war and we'll find out in the long run

ne wayz leave feed on my shit.........................

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=189165

it was written shortly after the re-election of bush and it was comtemplating a civil war between supporters and non-supporters due to the war..

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ye this wuz very tight, you had a good use of vocab, this sounded more like a poem but still you had a very nice flow...you got the skillz dawg, and I go wit bones in this one, you have to try to get the concept a lil' more