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05-22-05, 05:54 PM
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Yo im fighting for my salvation I don't care if your white, black , spanish or haitian this is gods nation//
coming to embrace this hipocritcal race// god is coming soon I don't care if you like it if you don't believe call a psychic// I don't care if you even like me my rhymes stick to you like a vian on I.V.// sin is lurcking in every coner just like a malt licker store in every hotel coner// I found peace in god he can do for you what he did for me gave me happeniss and hope unlike john the dead pope// out there is alot of flase advertisement open yours eyes to the truth.. open a connection don't be worried about your skin complection// its to change time to rearrange// he changed my life he changed my ways god has giving me better days// he can help you in so many ways that you cant even dream about in your possible days// all he wants is the best for us and all it seems we know how to do is fuss// give him a chance he will show you the light give him a chance don't put up a fight// im close to heaven im right on track lord help me and rip satan off my back// ripin mic gripen tight holy lord give me light// stay on track and hold your head up long, are days of living are not very long// nartural disasters dam demon bastrads// god is are saveur so lets watch are behavior// prophecies and dreams are coming ture just one step closer in the wild roller coaster// let his death not go for granted lets change are lives the way god planed it// Feedback would be nice. http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=191945 Last edited by Unblessed : 05-22-05 at 11:51 PM. |
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05-22-05, 07:27 PM
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Dont forget a link!or this will be closed
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05-22-05, 11:52 PM
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05-23-05, 12:22 AM
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lmfao. whoa stucture is weak vocabulary is decent. screw the // that makes you seem herbish emotion needs work imageyr is off a little flow is decent could be better but ya rhyme scheme is horrible but keep practing and elevating. 1
rtf links in the sig.
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05-23-05, 01:16 AM
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allright thanks for your input.
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05-23-05, 08:23 PM
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liked the words, but structure is a lil messed up though. also I didn't like the fact that you talked about being Christian and reppin God, but cussed at the end, thats pretty hypocritical to me. keep it up though
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 i come from a time when you earned respect, for your rhyme and the way you made words connect, not the money that you made or the girls you sexed, a concept you obviously haven't heard of yet Mars Ill
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05-23-05, 10:33 PM
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What do you mean by rippin on god? Bad words will come out my mouth im not prefect im just another sinner trying to make it.
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05-23-05, 10:36 PM
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liked it... Good creativitybut u gotta up your structure so it gets mo flo.... good topic
good vocab although it didn't rhymed at all..... RTF!!!!! on my link on my sig...
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05-23-05, 10:44 PM
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allright man........
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