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No Family To Care For (You Wanna Read This.)
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No family to care for...
School's out, the bell rings and kids start to get heading home So weak and prone, grade sixers get offered ice-cream cones By a stranger standing alone, avoiding other children's parents The kids knew better.. They were warned about guys like this He makes a move, the child shudders and avoids eye contact Stepping back, the man grabs his hand before he could react "What's wrong son... Someone bullying you around again?" To scared to act a plan… he just exclaimed "yeah.. Dad." * The man followed him home before he brutally murdered his father Waited before raping his mother, leaving him mentally slaughtered "Fuck me harder" is all she muffled on tape with her mouth stuffed And as if that wasn't enough... He forced the kid to watch snuff Day after day, he threatened the same stuff, "keep ya mouth shut.. Or you’ll be under your mother’s tombstone, with a changed month” * No family of his own, he adopted a slave to raise…his standards He was a man handler, but in his head he was… Ned Flanders Slandered by the slip of tongue, kid was handcuffed in a tub Then the man drew his gun, and filled it with a pool of blood. Then it was done… he realized a family man’s a man of wealth Rich himself, he sewed the wound and nursed him back to health * Weeks of hell, the kid’s had enough “I’m losing my fucking mind!” “What…After all I’ve done for you?! You wanna go… that’s fine.” “Really…? I can leave… no gimmicks or doubts?” “Yeah but first you gotta let me take the bullet out.” * He handcuffs him to the downstairs kitchen table, injects shots and throws Blood pouring from the nose, there goes another pair of clothes. He digs the knife into the kid's back and makes the incisions Cuts rip through due to poor decisions, all because of one ambition He wanted to have a family of his own, he was too lazy to chase it Digging the knife into his heart, the last he sees of this family…is the basement. http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2188359
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ps. this was based on a true story............................................. ......
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damn..................................
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Peace, Love, Unity
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Nice shit man, thats the first stuff I have seen from you and its dope, good story telling and what not, very graphic but it was very good. I've never seen this topic before either so tht always a good thing, and it kept me interested which lots of these other OMs don't... 8/10
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thanks man ill be sure to check that link when i get a chance. peace.
nominate. this. shiiitt.
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up....................
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Poet's Daughter.
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Ah nice dawg. Imaginary was good in this piece, the emotion needs to be upp a little. Work on your vocab. You had some meta's like comparing flanders and shit. But the only thing that stood out in your verse was imaginary.....I really like this because it's different and you approach it different.
Yo maybe we can callab sometimes...holla. Return a feed in my newest OM link in sig....1
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^ you ducked me
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My fault man i was too busy.....But now i have time and shit, but yo, once one of my battle closes cause i got 5 battles going on right now, I'll holla at you.
Please return a favor by leaving a feed in my Newest OM "The Monster Within"
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~*This Worldz A Sin So Why Hate Me For My Habits~*
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Mayne I was Really Enjoyin reading it!after ther first verse i really had to finish readin it!the imaginery was there!n the creativity was awesome!but i got a question ya said the MOTHER was gettin "RAPED" n she said "fck Me Harder"<???!LoL!but that Shyt Was hot first post i seen from you also and to me it seemz Nice!(9'10) Keep that shyt up homie!
RTF in ma OM!
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upsidaisy.............
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