YO.......this ya kid Da'Cument and man this shit is crack fam.....shouts to the game for being my inspiration.....yall gotta peap, this shit is sick!!!

400 barz and Runnin pt.1 (diss) 1st 100 barz

replied to:

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=196455
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=196371

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DaCument

yo wahts good fam.......

im feelin ya delivery and flow is pretty good...punches are nice....rapped like cassidy in jail....keliz ..smoothy...

will smith lost and found

switchin up the flow now....nice nice

ya pretty much trashin all tha commerical heads out there nice, im feelin it.

switchin up tha beat, ... more punches....switchen up the beat again...old school lol
ludacris pimpin ugly girls lol (waht beat is this?)

slim thug rappin bout shit that make no since lol

hahaha im feelin this verse....

switchin the beat up yet again...mike jones sayin his name

switchin up the beat again....beyonce jay-z baby...


just work on ya dubs/adlibs...other than that flow was good and delivery was nice...

good looz fam....

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DaCument

On the real, I only peeped this because I seen you were from the field. Your flow is kinda cheesy to me, like you stall real long some times like "missy elliot is like.................................lose..con.... troll" then other times you rush the hell out of it to get all the words in. The mixing isn't as smooth as could it be or consistant. That acapella skit is the first off-beat acapell I've ever heard. I think it's your voice that I'm not big on, but your lumpy flow and stretched portions dosen't help much either. It was easy to tell this track isn't anywher near 400 bars since you have a distinct intro and a distinct outro. So this is 100 bars (at most). No one's realistically gonna listen to other pieces of the shit if the first 100 ain't grab em.

BTW, you use a line IDENTICAL to j-bridge in "one more time". Lemme find out you heard that shit and snacked a line kid. The Rush will come see you with zero hesitation, lol.

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who the fuck is j bridge.......fam, thanks for the feedback, but its 100 bars, i didn't rush nothin, and my acapella wasn't off beat, how is it gone off beat, when it wasn't on beat....lmao

yo still uppin for real feedback

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DaCument

J-Bridge (like I just said) is dide that has the identical line you have. The 'R.I.P. B.I.G. 2-P-A-C' etc line. And Iain't say you rushed it. I said The Rush would come see you in a heart beat if you did bite the shit. And your acapell is off beat as in off rythm. just talking all over the place (which is probably why you cut the beat out there in the first place). And that's my feedback.

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ok....fam, uppin for more feed, thanks for your opinion

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DaCument

Pretty nice shit here man, but I noticed that in some spots, you dubs were off...Flow was consistent thru most...But you had some good shit man...Quality could be better, but jea man, keep spittin that crack, and hit me up for a collab kid.

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you came off frontin pretty big to me... like i dont understand y people wanna ruin hip hop ferreal.. y dont u be yourself instead of tryin to be like game 50, master p ect... i dunno i hate this kinda rap so u def dont want me to put in my 2 cents, but i thought this was garbage, lyrics, and mixing wise... voice was on the front tip to me... if you mixed it better it would sound maybe a lil more enjoyable, but everyword changes cuz u edited wierd as hell... nah i didnt like this one bit... but that is only MY OPPINION, i do wish you luck to build a fanbase and further your carreer, but pleez be urself, thats all i can say... but i'm not a fan... sorry...

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best Audio Head May- the Omen*

OMEN ON MYSPACE

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good lookz, for the feedback...sorry you didn't enjoy, maybe next time

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DaCument

im felin this, it was cool, lyrically it werent crzy or nuttin, WWWWWRRRRRRRRDDDDDDD @ tha check yoself beat, that voice shit in it is wack, ur mixin n quality aint as bad as omen made out, this is definently one of the better tracks on rapverse currently...keepe em comin yo

RTF:http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=196471

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good lookz fam....see thats the type of feedback i like to see, lol

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DaCument

i thought the mixing was horrible.... but thats just how i see it...

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best Audio Head May- the Omen*

OMEN ON MYSPACE

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ok....uppin for more feed its seems like its going back and forward with the love and hate

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DaCument

i appreciate all of it though....i got love in the hood off of it, thats all that matter, and my soundclick dudes is feeling it...i just want yall to feel it too, feel me fam....

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