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07-05-05, 11:46 PM
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My Dick Stay Wet
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Future in Silence...~Judicial~ Ft. ~Indeph~
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Indeph:
Visioned an uninhabited time,no kids and soulless.
Wasn't finished with growin'.So who's doom is the closest? I've seen the future,that's why I live for the moment.It hurts so bad,I swear I would kill to be growin.Just another inch. But I can't sit and control it.shit all I can do is prepare.But what I didn't figure out is by who,when, and where?But this made me think.Why do I stray to breath.Why choose horrble livin over great deseased? Judicial: when the truth is spoken all the lies are broken
false witness, people sutter like vocal cords is chokin truth losin, is a re-proven catastrophic conclusion thats eludin this exposure'll solution now thru the eyes of the innocent truth does shine when you thinkin its all ova it sheds of pride Indeph: Crucial important fluids..,still movin and ample.
Tense structures in my back healed brewin a candle. It all balances out on the milky way,my tempers' is feelin pain.. A moment,mental bruises'll heal,after twisted a million ways. and it changes untill,the cycle arives comin back,when a crisis attack. this is life as a craft.Boomerang ways,waves timely can raft. your mind seeing beautiful images at the time that you die. Like a God's wish.Similar to the mob hit.promises in the closet. Life cannot invision a toxin,damages to your esafugus. Isn't the biggest of problems.Life is spritual and physical..... simple as a genesis topic.....the age of digitials stoppin........soon prostitutes.... will be robots with boobs.....babies today is not the youth. passed the proms and suits.Life is like juice at a constant boost. Judicial: when truth is bounded by hate, silence, and lies its time to realize with wide-eyes & spoken replies that truth speaks to soothe the ears of the violent its the times of homicidal death, when that truth is silent these illusions is hidin reality while its bruisin you from with-in confusin lifes contributions thinkin darkness is up lift-in now we see the possibilities and dat truth isnt past tense just because the volume of truth is low doesnt mean its absent Last edited by Judicial : 07-05-05 at 11:56 PM. |
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07-05-05, 11:54 PM
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Banned: Biting
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07-06-05, 12:00 AM
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Lol ysd@....judicial drop a link or this will be closed
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07-06-05, 12:07 AM
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Not_Indeph
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07-06-05, 12:09 AM
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My Dick Stay Wet
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IP:
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07-06-05, 10:54 AM
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My Dick Stay Wet
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IP:
uppin..........i dont think they like us
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07-06-05, 11:03 AM
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Odi et Amo
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IP:
Loving this collab, concept you guys went with is nice and interesting in fact. I can't really see who dropped best because both brought something of their own to the piece. Vocab was excellent, had nice level of complexity yet it remained understandable for the readers. Flow was good, had multis, internal rhyming which all improved the flow. Imagery was there but the strongest aspect was the emotion without a doubt. Had nice metaphorical images, poetic and insightful wordings, props to both of you for this one!
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07-06-05, 11:06 AM
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Rastafari Walk Tall
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IP:
Right, i had 2 re-read this piece bout three or foour times to full understand what it was about, cos it was real deep n yall said a lot of shit, both of you were really on par wid vocab and language, theres parts of this which are pretty much poetic and not just rhymes as if it was a poem, structurally theres verses were both of u fall off, the flow is choppy, yall need to learn where to properly place punctuation aswell, this was a dope ass read betta than the usual 50Cent Remixes u see in open mic these dayz..keep droppin
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07-06-05, 11:14 AM
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My Dick Stay Wet
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IP:
well the flow is choppy because when you center the verses the lines might not be all together and that forces you to read it differently...but i see what your saying...thanks for the feed both......
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07-06-05, 11:29 AM
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kinda what Drama Queen said...
I've seen the future,that's why I live for the moment. ^loved that.... hmm...if i went on quoting...it would take me forever.....Ideph, you got some sick ass imagery going...and Judicial, ya multis are crazii....this was well worth the read....I loved the second verses to both of yu guys....the topic was dope....keep the pens going
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07-06-05, 07:56 PM
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My Dick Stay Wet
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IP:
thanks for the feed...uppin
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07-06-05, 11:17 PM
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IP:
Good collab guys, enjoyed the read and the images it brought to life, keep it up, peace 9/10.
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07-06-05, 11:34 PM
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Not_Indeph
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nominate for OM of the month Or I won't heart you anymore.
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07-07-05, 12:03 PM
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Not_Indeph
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up up up up up.
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