http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2284980

Verse 1
I roll smooth with sweet flows, more like caramel
with depicted skills to twist you up and leave you parallel
to the earth's equator, spinnin 'round like a carousel
cock back my spharinx, but pop more than a pair of shells
with intensive strives of standard hits to erase your speech
stomp others words like their mouths replaced the feet
cause the mic's my temple, my koran, my holy bible
it's clear and simple, it's my god, my one and only rifle
and i'm fully equipped and armed with wires and connectives
to blow steam faster than kettles were the heats intensive
cause the flows mistikal, welded under a magician's wizardry
to lock up souls faster than ancient phsycians, literally!
to be contemplating devils and destroying rappers
with more wierd techniques than a <a href='http://consumeralertsystem.com/cas/zx-hclick.php?hid=270' target='_blank'>chocolate</a> bar deployin crackers
i'm strapped with annoyin' racket, wrapped with growin rappids
to hold this holy mic in my arms and rap with holy tactics

hook x2
I'll stand here waitin for another challenge
for there's another chance to blow off average
and rise up to the next level in petistules
hold the mic in hand and settle the nest set of fools

Verse 2
I'll come in a room with heavier drops than constipation
and squeeze through anyone easier than diahrrea, try and say shit!
cause i'll walk down a lonely path, with-hold my wrath
wait for a victim, stick 'em and get ready to oppose a crash
cause my rhymes flow at twenty above the limit
non stop horse power since muels try to hate, but love to mimic
with a voice that's heard in all gutters through ghettos
and roll so deep you'll need to stock on shovels and barrels
rubble of rebels is left to get picked with popper scoopers
keep the enviorment clean with verbal hits than threw out losers
spew at users of non violent, but friendly punches and claims
a few things as lame as their rhymes, such as their names
so for now i'll drop the mic and watch a foolish person reach
whip out a whole new style when they knew they first should peek

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uppin' on feedback

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yeh this piece was decent for real fam. the flow was real good and the structure was nice.
i got kinda baffled from when you had all that code at the end of the first verse. but it was all good though. i thought you had good use of vocab and i thought the first bar of the second verse was funny as hell. i thought this piece was a decent piece. overall i'd give it 7/8 out of 10.

Peace

aight, thanks man, damn i never even noticed that link in there....ummm donno how it got there...lol

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