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08-20-05, 04:27 PM
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i miss u daddy but..Fuck you
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if i had to start sayin why i hate you i'ld be mo-no-to-nous
you said u love me and ran away dats simply ho-mo-to-nous
how dare u want her bak after 18 years u left her in her shoes?
I thank God cos he lives, now shes makin it and u a family abuse
she had to sell dope and risck her life in the name of ur sorry ass
i wish u could DIE cos u never showed what u want,nigga grade ur class
i've learnt to live without you from 87 till now and ima make it till i DIE
even if she said yes,you really dont want me to cook ur dick for a pie (right?)
the only good thing u EVA did in ur life was burst ur shit to make me
cos i'm Stronger and Wiser than u are,u'd turn Blue if i proved me
bitch you were never there to make things positive in times of negativity
yes i Hate you,i'm filled with it cos i came outta the balls of a mega iniquity
why cant you behave like a man for once and tell her how much u were a cunt?
i know you went to school bitch,words aint enuff i cud get 'em bunt (burnt)
now you so deserted that even the bitches you fucked are tired of you
its a shame you fuked your aunt too n u've been voodooed,u just a Big Fool!
i wish i had some steel on my hand,i'ld knock off ur jaws and give you a brain bust
cos its intimidatin i came to earth and cant boast its my father i trust
nigga make hays while the sunshines..u cant get what u neva gave
infornt of a normal human bein u cant stand cos u'll neva be brave
even though i still be missing you... i'm still pissed to b lovin you
when i look in the mirror my reflectin is you..but i hate it cos im to b killin you
i got tears runnin down my cheeck..i dont know if im hittin the right keys
the last time i saw u was when i clocked 3...i still remember cos i got 4 pix
dont be fooled when i show im weak..cos u fucked up and shit makes me flip
....fuck it im out..too pissed to continue...
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Yvonne is dope
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08-20-05, 07:16 PM
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IP:
Drop a link or this will be closed
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08-20-05, 08:17 PM
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Light Weight
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real emotion, powerful use of imagery and good piece.
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08-21-05, 05:05 AM
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Yvonne-Early In The Morning
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Originally Posted by B. Magik
Yvonne is dope
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Originally Posted by Terumoto
Word. I respect christians like you.
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Now That's Wassup!
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08-21-05, 06:44 AM
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Odi et Amo
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Damn girl: the anger just pours out this piece and the emotion is so raw, so heartfelt. It's obvious you wrote this straight from the heart, get all the rage you got in your being out there through words and shit. Keep venting this way cause it creates nice pieces!
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08-21-05, 02:22 PM
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this was a good piece.....nice use of emotion....you portrayed how angry you felt really well.....ther imagery was nice but overall the emotion carried this piece through....keep it up
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08-21-05, 03:18 PM
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pain is weakness leaving the body
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gr8 emotion and imagery. if you're not into poetry, u should start. very nice piece. keep doin what u doin. if u do get into poetry, try out for the Inc.
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08-22-05, 03:23 PM
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thanx mayne...keep on hollarin peeps
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Yvonne-Early In The Morning
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Originally Posted by B. Magik
Yvonne is dope
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Originally Posted by Terumoto
Word. I respect christians like you.
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Now That's Wassup!
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08-23-05, 11:24 AM
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Hell yeah
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then u talk bout eminem hatin his mother
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08-24-05, 04:41 PM
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then u talk bout eminem hatin his mother
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lmao....
1) i aint famous
2) i dont ALWAYS drop on this
...lol thanx for peeping
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Yvonne-Early In The Morning
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Originally Posted by B. Magik
Yvonne is dope
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Originally Posted by Terumoto
Word. I respect christians like you.
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Now That's Wassup!
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08-24-05, 04:41 PM
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Originally Posted by Speats
then u talk bout eminem hatin his mother
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lmao....
1) i aint famous
2) i dont ALWAYS drop on this
...lol thanx for peeping
and thanx 4 d fb i was almost forgettin this thread...
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Hit This Up And I'll Hit Your's Too
Yvonne-Early In The Morning
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Originally Posted by B. Magik
Yvonne is dope
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Originally Posted by Terumoto
Word. I respect christians like you.
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Now That's Wassup!
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08-24-05, 04:13 PM
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A Life Of Chryme
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had lots of emotion, i felt your anger, good use of vocab.....nice structure, gave it good flow..over all im feelin that this is an excellent piece 8/10...keep it up....girl nice job 
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08-26-05, 03:00 AM
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oops did that twice..
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Yvonne-Early In The Morning
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Originally Posted by B. Magik
Yvonne is dope
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Originally Posted by Terumoto
Word. I respect christians like you.
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Now That's Wassup!
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