After dark all cats are leopards.
- American Indian Proverb

At 9:55, she purrs her body onto mine,
skin silk and her beauty's is so divine.
9:56, she kisses my lips my body trembles,
is this beyonce?- cause it seems resemble.
9:57, my mind going into a dream-land,
eyes closed-moaning moving my hands and
at 9:58 she gets naked showing her best features,
my body get's weaker 9:59, like i'm having a seizures.
10:00 the start of dark and I turn on the lights,
Felt the agony..Damn my wife? only felt shock,
..as she took my life



Accidents Don’t Happen

she praticed her lines, moved the furniture around,
put facuiet water on her cheeks-she's crying now.
Wiped her prints from the knife-put it in my hand,
gasping-clutching at life-my sight is getting bland.
Rolled around in my blood trying to fool the cops,
placed my body by the stairs-like I tripped and dropped.
Lying on the floor asking myself "why?"-so confused,
my mind's is so bemused while the pain reeks from
...being abused
Bullet wound seeking through-I'm going away,
before I closed my eyes i told myself
.........."every bush of rose lie's a snake"


"For of all sad words of tongue or pen,
The saddest are these: 'It might have been!'"
- John Greenleaf Wittier

She rolls into the bank with a smile on her face,
strong legs and devine beauty-other women
..surrounds her with jeolously & hate
Remembers the tragedy that she planned-ended swell,
planted the trap, fooled the cops and now she
....thinks she's getting a rewarded for doing so well?
Walked up to the counter, smile wide as the moon,
hiding her devilish heart from the eyes in the room,
with her sweet voice she asks the banker to withdraw,
money from her husband account and then." O GOD!"
A happy grin on her face "yep it's alot of money isn't it?",
"No" the banker said "there's no money"...
the accountant must've changed since you last visited.



Ran into her car, real tears start to pour from her pupils,
out of control breathing like she's having a heart attack
...stomach twisting-like everything she's done was futile
her heart pounding in pain-this is getting crucial-"why!?",
felt that she had everything planned out, but your fire
...went out into the sky
still sitting in the car, fingers feeling fragile- can't turn the key,
then turns on her your left side- feeling fear and weak in her
...knees
It's him staring into her eyes, he can taste the perfect word
at this time...revenge
Dark clouds and lightning rumble thru into his head getting
...ready to avenge
She screams in agony- face red, the doors are locked!
"I killed you!"..then the man- open his shirt-Gun Cocked

A vest..

Too bad she isn’t wearing one.



-Will Drop Links later-

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Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
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Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
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ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
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not to sure about the title lol
but the first verse was creative by reading that i was expecting soemthing that had to do with sex or love then u added it those last few words which drew me in
2nd verse is really good the quote at thte end was a nice little touch after the first verse the placed my body by the stairs to look like i dropped line made me think he might have dne it himself for the love of his wife that he showed in the first verse interesting
3rd verse the bank part was good a nice little twist i think u could have came up with soemthing ebtter than him wearing a vest though with him raising his shirt i tottally expected that but not too bad
the only thing id say i wasnt feeling was the ending and the flow in parts was this a poem?

anyways return feed when u can

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mystery Is a Freak!!

ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private
ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged*

meh...........wow this shit was long

i liked it, title is wut got me in....lol not sure abou it

umm ur emotion imagery first off was great..ur creativeness was good...vocab excellent..overall great drop..structure..mehh nothing to complain about...overall pretty decent drop nah mean? 9/10...rtf on a battle )

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