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Yeah was gonna free then wrote some too, so it aint a freestyle like i said it would be.

Gimme harsh feed, so i can elevate

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Links:
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=211703
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=211665

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Aight...Yo Its Good Beat...,Good Lyrics Voice is koo UK is koo lol the flow is aight you need work on it seem to be not confident get more confident on the mic,be like YO really emotional n shit lol but its good for ya first audio good job keep up!

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cheers mate....

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Not feeling the beat, if you wanna diss someone pick a more fast, hyped up beat you know. It allows you to put more anger in your voice, was a hard beat to spit on too because it was so slow. That's why it sounded in some places like you were just talking. Like UNF said, let us hear you cant stand this dude, let us feel the anger and shit ya know. Emotion needs to be there, definitely in a diss! And it's ya second audio hehe but it's aight though, you just made it hard on yaself with the beat actually...but keep on working ya know...

(Btw, i'm the last person to criticize on you because I'm only starting myself but anyway)

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totally dis-agree... battle tracks done like that are EXTREMELY played, also using beats that have for example a really kiddy jokey vibe to them, allows for a more joking vibe on the track in your delivery and disses basically giving the vibe of "your a twat, but shits all jokes to me, ill just laugh whilst i clown you" where as what ur talking bout is like "your a fuckin cunt, you piss me off so fuckin much i wanna murder you" type shit... theres millions of ways u can approach disses e.t.c... you just need to broaden your horizons and open your mind to more creative ways of doing.

i remember when eminem released stan, in the same week my mate jacked the beat, n used the exact same concept, except to diss somebody with it, but still keep the verses like eminem did them...

anyways enough rambling, to the track

beat is shit tbh but thats personal preference...flow is better than expected, you was bein hesitant at times, delivery is shit to be blunt, you need to keep practicing n build confidence to help u to spit the right emotion, make it more interesting n shit... keep at it.. lyrically, again nothing stood out for me here but again all comes with practice.

Ayo lyrics decent, but emotion up that reallly show that you dont like this nigga....flow was off a lil, precence u gotta up and delivery, however you had decent shit for youre first...keep it up...

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thanks, and it was my first "proper" audio dq.

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hey i have that beat too...Lol...
You remind me when i was starting out....
You used the enough of the Fuck word. lol
i can't quiet understand you.......Post the lyric son.
cool accent though

up........................

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werd, this was pretty dope for your first one

as dq said...u needa get a more hyped up verse.....get more lyrically heard
couldnt quite understand the accent...but i listened to it 2 times so i got it....yea this is pretty good...hopefully more to come....1

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so thats what you sound like...

ummm yes?

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damn i never thaught ud sound like this man, UK voice are cool, flow is eumm dunno man, get a better mic, well not really, ur startin so ur gonna figure out how to fix quality and all so fuck the quality for now, lyrics are cool man pretty good, beat is alright too, overall keep dropin bro and keep reppin LL to the fullest

cheers mate,

i need to fuck around with vocals

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