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10-23-05, 04:54 PM
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Intermental - Keep Ya Head Up (uplifitin ish right here)
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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=212029
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=211961 www.soundclick.com/intermental "Keep Ya Head Up" Peep it...leave links ill rtf... holla atcha boii... 1
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10-23-05, 05:01 PM
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beat is appropriate for this type of introspective/reflective track
ur vocals cud be amped a couple decibels ur flow is on beat...Im jus not sure I like ur rhyme scheme here and in a couple spots, you forced your bars with too many words deep lyrics...and I'm familiar with some of them...  flow picked up toward the end of the track...good and Tupac's Keep ya head up kept popping in my mind...that chorus just invokes his...for better or worse...I dunno...not bad though pretty decent track almost a 7/10 just needs polish deep though
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10-23-05, 05:02 PM
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Thanks alot for the feed.............
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10-23-05, 05:03 PM
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Yo Beat Is Dope Like Real Smooth melodic Beat ...Ya Flows Dope HOok Is Nice 1st verse nice lyrics ya started well at the end you timed it right as i felt you were jus gonna fall 0ff then lol hook again lol dope 2nd verse i like this bettta got a betta storyline ya know?well this is one of ya best tracks not ya best tho keep up one.
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10-23-05, 05:19 PM
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thanks...............
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10-23-05, 05:48 PM
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damn man i'm feeling this beat for real....real mellow.....i like the hook its pretty damn dope fam bam....the melody fits the beat real nice.....your first verse damn i'm feelin that flow....those first two lines real dope....damn these lyrics r pretty damn good...your emotions are mad crazy you sounding like how it feels in your mind n shit famo.....this tracks just fuckin sick...damn i'm feeling this shit i might have too download it....that hook just is nice....overall-8.5/10 damn real nice famo
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10-23-05, 05:53 PM
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thanks dawg
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10-23-05, 06:41 PM
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Chorus] the chorus is accually good the voice suites the beat well. the flow is nice. I aint feelin your voice though. but that don't matter. the lyrics is dope. Were you thinkin of tupac when you made this song? anyways overall i give the chorus 6/10 [1st Verse] Well here we go. Your voice fits the beat well. I don't like the slur you got though. But anywayz. you didn't ride the beat to nicely it was decent but it could be better. Your emotion was alright. not too good. but you'lll get better. now here's where i think you went wrong. i really don't think what your talking about is true. talking about mom being a crackfeind and your boy locked in the pen i really don't think that true. but never know. the lyrics were alright. some shit was stretched but other than that i give this a 6/10[/b] Beat the beat is nice. i like the melody and the piano on this. its a real nice beat to listen to at night. just lay down and listen to the words. This is a very touching beat. 8/10 Second Verse Once again you should fix your emotion. make you sound like you mean it more. and make sure we can understand every word your saying. I can tell you put some work into this song. and it shows. this is probably the best song from you. word 6/10 Quality i'm pretty sure you used to have that scratchy ass quality before. but it got alot better. Do you use cool edit? or did someone master it for you? keep elevating you will be a good rapper i can see it. you elevated like whoa!. 8/10 overall i give this about a 6.8/10 this is probably the best track i've heard from you. i really like this especially from what i've heard from you in the past. keep it up famz
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10-23-05, 07:47 PM
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^^^^Thanks alot dayum thats the most indepth feedback ive ever got so I apreciate that..and yeah shit is true...im usin cool edit and I did the quality...and the tupac track didnt really cross my mind too much....but thanks for the feed
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10-23-05, 07:50 PM
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Not bad it cool
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10-23-05, 08:01 PM
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IIgh..ayo u mean free beats...???
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10-23-05, 08:34 PM
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10-23-05, 08:13 PM
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beat fits perfect...not realy feelin your voice,the lyircs was..im gona say more real then deep...inspirational shit..i lthought it was ok
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10-23-05, 08:24 PM
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Thanks................
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10-23-05, 09:24 PM
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Iigh..I posted in there........
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