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http://community.rapverse.com/showt...309#post2585309
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...304#post2585304

LyricallySpeakin(to "Aint No Click" beat by Lloyd Banks)

I’d like to welcome yall to the soul of a thuggicated artist
Who comes off as an animated lyriCIST
This aint about just coming from nowhere and havin something
It’s all about expressing your sell lyrically, rapping
These rhymes reach errone no matter the language
Emotional raps, spitting this shit, expressing my anguish
Unlike all of these other “thugs” I aint sayin I got this
But I’ll decapitate all your rhymes watch me, I’m on this
Rap shit. and riding this out like any other
Man who expresses himself by pushing his lyrics further
Cuz this game has slipped of its own borders
Now errone wants to be a fake thug giving orders
Errone now ridin G-Unit, not me, not even for 2 quarters
Cuz they not bein creative, they not turning the corners
But many not see it this way, they try to get to the game
By copying the hot mufacka, so we all start sounding the same
But its time, for poets to rise, commence a revolution
Step up together, rewrites raps constitution
The game’s bout to get changed, leavin fake rappers I mourning
They lyrics become obsolete, dead ghost just roaming
Through space of what used to their up rise
And now slowly becoming their very demise
Lets give back the game its very essence
And real lyricists, its time to announce our presence
And too all those fake cats who claim to the Answer
The Answer is Allen Iverson, Y’all just cancer
A stain on the games essence, ya’ll aint no hero
Ya’ll weak, here’s a new nickname, lets call you zero
You all speak tough but how come we don’t fear yall
Yall claim to have the buzz in the streets, but we just don’t hear yall
So lets see the results, u say u good, but we do see it
Ergo, let go the useless boosting, you’re not gon be it
All u talk about is cheese what u a fuckin mouse
U shook u goin north why real birds fly to south

Enough of dem fakes ass cats now real issues
The government is trying to while their nose with us like we some tissues
And how come we never find the shootists in these rap killings
Is errone sees this suspicions, or just my feelings
Of being labeled as a threat and lord willin
Being targeted by erry cop who wants to make a killin
In his filed and prove that he a hero
And trying to fill our hearts full of fear-O
And why did US went to war somebody tell
They saying terrorism, but that story doesn’t sell it
It doesn’t quite exist but government says it
Does so they can push toward they very own targets
And now all these politicians tryin to argue
Whats wrong and right overseas, but home come
We still trying to figure out, the problems at home
The kids on the streets becoming hustlas
And why are we truly struggling, noone never asked us
They try to make solutions for us with “progressive” decision
But really all it takes is one thug with a vision
But nobody has asked him just yet, they could care less
They just faking this, cuz they really fear this
Rap game because we speak at em
Any action from a local rapper gonn upset’em
We truly know whats wrong why don’t u ask us
Instead of spending all your time tryin to harass us
So why do we still have dumb people make decisions
Lets collect us all together and bring to life our visions
So let me finish like Hova, makin this song cry
And sighin with relief to see passion in oppressed eyes
So step up here comes the genius on the rise
With visions that’s capable of seing through lies
You cant deceive me im all about the intellect
Im like a lyricall killer in effect
So roll down the windows when u smoking that ganja
If they told you ro stop tell then “fuck ya”
Cuz we have being waiting for freedom a while
Its time to rid of illisions made by political liers
Tellin erron we threat with "our" lyrics
What you mean by "hour" we dont rap for 60 minutes
They got us so scared we watch what we can say
Well I don’t care what I say so have a nice fuckin day!

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I thought most of this verse was dope but it was a little longish but it had really good flow and I like some of ur lyrics. Some of ur shit was really creative it was interesting to read so keep writing man and you should be doing fine. Me and you could make a song together if u want. Would you like to collab? I'll give this a 9.10

nyone else has anything to say to this thing?

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seriously, noone got none to say about this anymore?

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this was really long........but anyway....need to work on your structure a lil bit, some lines were streched, flow was inconsistent also so work on that.....vocab was nice in places, need to improve your rhyme scheme coz some words didn't rhyme like they should....but it was ok for a first drop 5/10

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word kinda long man flow ight.. 6/10

~1~

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hi im new.

I liked dem lyrics yer they are very nice, liked this line the most

The kids on the streets becoming hustlas
And why are we truly struggling, noone never asked us
They try to make solutions for us with “progressive” decision
But really all it takes is one thug with a vision

lol i just like the way it flowed ..catched my eye like..

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flowed perfectly to me man keep it up

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im the ILLEST

This was a pretty weak drope it could have been alot better but seing that it was your first drop i guess it really wasnt that bad of a drop , you need to elevate on using more creative wordplay(wordplay), and expanding your vocabulary ..make the reader imagin what your saying but they words you put in your drop ..Ya dig?

But overall it was an adverage drop..keep it up

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