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01-15-06, 06:40 PM | #1 | |
Maggot
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Happy Birthday Doctor Martin Luther king
IP:
Happy Birthday Doctor Martin Luther king
For most leaders it was a whack try after a black eye To discuss civil rights it was a liberal fight one must die For, caused bad reputation, sad situation exists right here In America racism chased the rhythm of freedom with fear An all around leader must be like ground cedar rooted solid In civil rights, before DOCTOR KING this country’s hydraulics Were bad for black folks a lot of foul jazz like living in Alcatraz We were prisoners of all variety in a tall society even Malcolm Shabazz Realized this, for blacks and minority its written facts that majority Never got equal rights so it was a legal fight to improve their authority In the US which impose new stress on them daily, the problem was an extreme Roar like a squeaky screen door// Doctor Martin Luther King a minister but blessed with success leader Of Civil rights faced many pivotal fight well spoken and greeter Of peace, racism cause phony complex stress like a pony express Had to saddle horseback to battle the voice of whack white finesse He felt that segregation was just separation of a great nation a policy Unfair and to democracy caused tons of despair no freedom or quality Racism is a broad act and fraud-in-fact its impact could crack this nation’s Foundation it made the constitution no solution it read untrue that was devastation America needs a new character indeed she must live out her true creed That all men are created with an equal chance king knew how to lead |
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01-15-06, 07:08 PM | #2 | |
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IP:
Alright job here man, in the second verse, the lines were really stretched and thats when i stopped enjoying it. This piece was basically a theme for tomorrow, since its MLK day, so hopefully others get the message you tried to send out like i did. Work on your vocab and structure, so its easy for the reader to know what your talking about without continuing a sentence. peace.
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01-15-06, 07:35 PM | #3 | |
Maggot
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IP:
Suspicious THANKS FOR RESPONDING BUT MLK true birthday is today homey although they're celebrating it tomorrow
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01-15-06, 07:57 PM | #4 | |
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IP:
Drop two links or this wil be closed
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