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07-02-06, 05:01 AM | #1 | ||
...The Truth...
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Take A Listen........................................
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This the beginning of the end light skinned nigga wit a vision Mellato militant, here to take the rap game into a crash collision Scars covering the wounds on my backs, that came from my ancestors That was raped by the slave masters N I’m still here, still gonna represent This hip hop generation, that never left but came back under false perceptions They listed Malcolm as a problem, but his own people shot ‘em Same thing wit Mr.King Now we going through the same struggle, still misunderstood How can something so beautiful be used for something not good But never get it twisted, this rap shit started n came about from the hood From the depths of his feet, to his flesh wounds start’n to heal Just to ripped open again, stay on point but never die, yes, we to fly They wanna be us, wanna use us, for they own wonders If that’s the case, tell me y im so stuck on they wonders Yes im talking about the forbidden fruit, the same thing Emmit Til gave his life for 2 Doller bills not enuff to cover the light bill U wakc mcs aproach’n me, wit light skills Its show n prove until u prove u worth my listen |
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07-02-06, 05:16 AM | #2 | |
Whys That?
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IP:
you need to links to open mics you have left feed back on or open mic mods will close this.
This is very generic,nothing new in it at all. You have some good vocab though, and structure is half decent,but could be alot better. but yeh, originality is lacking. word, make sure you get those links up. |
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07-02-06, 05:53 PM | #3 | ||
...The Truth...
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07-02-06, 08:54 PM | #4 | ||
...The Truth...
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IP:
thnx for da feed, uppin dis shit...................................
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07-03-06, 07:00 PM | #5 | ||
New to RV
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IP:
This Shit Was Straight, Could Have Been Longer But I Liked The Concept... Rhyme Scheme Was Simple But Overall It Was Nice.
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07-03-06, 09:07 PM | #6 | ||
...The Truth...
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IP:
thnx for da feed
uppin dis............................. |
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07-04-06, 04:28 AM | #7 | ||
...The Truth...
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IP:
up up n away.....................................
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07-04-06, 07:46 PM | #8 | ||
...The Truth...
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IP:
stop snooze'n.............................
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07-06-06, 02:01 AM | #9 | |
Light Weight
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IP:
this is poetry but its nice poetry to make it rap you must be in first person with attitude I'm gonna change aome to rap
look i have a misled plan as a red man and that begin my end // have vision of collisions with mellato troops, trying to crash the trend // of the rap game i'll slp the lame with open fist not joking with this // |
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