heat 4 the haters
you coming in this industry is like giving meat to a baker
call me a thermal cause i have heat for the haters
or you call me october 31st cause i have a treat for the fakers
sharp like a razor ,and yall gettin hit like a glacier
i aint got time like a broken clock of the wankstas and hateness
thats why i try my hardest to act real and not get caught up in the fakeness

chin at a obtuse angle to show my head is already high
i aint got to get in a jet,plane,or a helicopter cause im already fly
niggas dont want to see me make it like watching a sweatty guy
yo im untouchable so people compare me to osama bin ladin and the f.b.i
ill leave ya girl legs all in the open like being in the public eye
claiming that you gangsta is just one mistrusted lie
when i say im nice i aint talkin the way i act
cause all that hating will get you smacked
leave you thinking like T.I song of why you had to do that


http://community.rapverse.com/showt...=1#post30806486

now i bet a lot of peeps gonna on here nsay ur lines look like they runnin but im not dat typelines were a bit stretched but 4 da most part is ayt peep my lyrical hustla i finished it homie

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my first battle since comin back 2 rv

lyrical hustla dont sleep rv

if i reply 2 ya post return da love heres my links

i think i already gave you feedback
and goodlooking on the feedback even though it was short

this joint was ok, you had some pretty decent bars in there that i was feelin. you should work on ya flow though and makin some of your punches a little more tough. but stay up shawty and hit me back on my joint.....1....

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Relax and Jot Notes=Squad-Up feat Big City and Hitchcock
Rap or Die=Squad-Up feat Hitchcock
Dollas in the Bank= Squad-Up feat Hitchcock
Squeeze First = Squad-Up

good looking on the feedback even though i expected my verses to be more than ok

can i get some more feedback

Ay man that was neat yo keep it up man like ol dude said keep da punchlined flowin like doodoo in da rectum ya heard dont let nobody get ya down keep ya head up and pursue ya dream!!

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I'm a real chick thats what u fail to understand...Just bring the hottest you got and I'll cool u off like a fan....Underestimate me as much as you please...I'll rip the mic so hard have you down on yo knees beggin me please!![COLOR=Green]

i feel you,and ima try to keep my head up cause what these niggas say is coming in and out of my ear like sex in the ear
ya heard me
good looking on the feedback
and can i get more feedback

can i get some more feedback

can i get some feedback from this dead ass site

Only thing ya need to work on is your flow. The rest is fine.

- 8/10

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can i get some feedback

this was ok...flow was ok...

your lines were a lil simple
when you would say a line it would start off nice but you didnt deliver to make it a hard punch...

6/10

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I remember puttin quarters in the game and the Jukebox/
now i'm puttin quarters of them thangs in a shoe box/
Then i break em down no bags its just loose rocks/
no pump against me and the world i'm like 2pac
^^T-Rex

son dis was ight, but theres some ish i suggest you work on ya dig? some of your lines wasn't hittin that hot, but some were good. your flow just seems like its off someparts. thats what i would focus on. i see you got some punches and just work on ya wordplay. but you off to a good start mah dude. keep doin you...1...

hit me back on my shit...........SO destructive, or Cartely Boyz.......