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Old 10-10-06, 10:37 PM   #1
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"Klub" Big Picture and Yvonne...SKM SKM SKM

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1st verse- yvonne

hook- yvonne

2nd verse- Big Picture

same hook and we split the third verse

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Old 10-10-06, 10:46 PM   #2
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wow this sounds real boring..yvonne's part lacks the energy needed for this kinda song. i mean its called "Klub" so you might wanna bring the energy a "klub" would have. lyrically this wasnt anything special. the hook makes me wanna sleep. thats it.

dude comes in cool. he has more energy so thats cool
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Old 10-10-06, 11:33 PM   #3
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lol @ yvonne on this one. she kinda has a 50 cent flow with the way she wrote the lyrics. just kinda reminds me of a female version of 50 on 1 line. Nice job though yvonne I like your hook on this as well, you comin up mad fast with ya audio skills. keep it up gurl. Big Picture, dude I like what you did with this one, nice adlibs and ya quality sounds pretty good. lyrics and flow was pretty deadly, I liked ya verse a lot on this one dude! overall pretty good track. 1
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Old 10-10-06, 11:43 PM   #4
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boringggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggg wow at me almost fallin alseep in this.......no energy.....no delevery......nothing...just not what was needed for this klub track......
lmfao at picture sayin this is that gross.....your right....your flow was decent and ish,,,lyrics was good but i couldnt get over tha beat i didnt like it anyway but then yvonnes no emotion and boring delevery just killed this for me.....hook was also terrible........
sorry man and yvonne no hate wut so ever straight feed just not sumthing i would bump again.....
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return tha favour on exposing tha industry.........werdizzle my nizzle
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Old 10-11-06, 12:49 AM   #6
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yvonne kinda loud
delivery is lacking but if you eqd your verse it would help a lil
flow was kinda choppy
hook dont like it at all
flow is cool delivery is cool nothing special
you stumble and mumble in a spot or two

ok track 5/10
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Old 10-11-06, 01:07 AM   #7
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in what parts were u critiqueing me? very confusing
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Old 10-11-06, 02:19 AM   #8
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...........its all about elevating so yeah i'll keep trying!


..thanx y'all all the same!



we working on this again so yeah,xpect changes!
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Old 10-11-06, 03:18 PM   #9
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i couldn't picture hearing this track in the club...the energy lacks....the lyrics are good for what it was made for.....the hook lags.....i'd up the emotion that's what's really ruining the track....the second cat had good flow and a lil better emotion but all the verses sounded the same lyrically and emotionally....keep workin at it 6/10
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^hm..i see!


thanx......
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Old 10-12-06, 08:30 PM   #11
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ight i heard ur verse before it seems like u added a lot of bass to ur voice awww addlibvs is coo but yeah this sounds boring yall need to bring alot of energy hook needs work next dude is aight too overall decwent drop keep elevatin
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