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verses: Johnny
hooks: Johnny

Let me know how this shit is, yup

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3150658
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3150655

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good beat, good chorus... your flows a lil better than last time i heard ya, but its still really choppy and doesn't flow into each line. qualities hella better and jazz, but try makin ya lines flow into each other better- werd

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thanks for the feed cuzz

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beat is slammin

I like ur delivery at the start...real hard

lyrics became a drone after a while and I started daydreaming


I like ur mechanics tho...voice/flow/etc. works here


keep it up



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thanks for the feed Q uppin

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ya quality needs to be upped........i remember ya quality used to be a lot better.....ya flow had some parts where u were draggin the words or syllables out to fit the beat.....but ya energy is nice ya delivery is there......the hook is strate......
man the best advice i can give is add more syllables so it won't drag and the flow is more fluid....aiite man..keep droppen..

pz

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thanks for the feed. upp

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