These Mouthy Niggaz Be Testin Me,
Tryin To Call me Out Pop Shots
And Get Tha Best Of Me,
Like I Cant Hold My Own,
As If Theyll Get Me Well Exceptionally,
I Cant Let These Fuckas Talk
They Aint Worth Shit Till Tha Death Of Me,
They Worthless Not Deservin
Niggaz Is Fowl Im Flagrant,
Moved Around A Lot Didnt Have
Much Time To Make Friends, O Well
It Happened Anyway So Naturally
With Many Blazed Just Facts To Be
Moods Usually Calm That Actual Peace,
Forrealz, One Day Itll All Make Sense
I Used To Get Heavy Intoxed
And Wonder Where Tha Days Went,
Id Walk Down Tha Block And Let
A Hot Joint Hit Tha Pavement
Benn Pretty ill SInce Grade Ten
Started Towards Tha End Of Eigth
Said Muthafuck All Of These Fake Friends,
Racin Against Time Never Is Tha Time
Tha Race Ends Stuck In It Till Im Finished I Am

All I Wantz Is Like One Reply..I Replied
To Some Of Yall....At Least From DGR

~Content~ ~Flowy~

yo the shits phat needs to kinda flow just a little more yo go check out my shit just another day its chemistry tell me what you think

youd have to hear it in audio

jay z- i did it my way instrumental

tha shit flows on point completely....peace

^it may flow in audio but this is text and everyone usually has a different beat in their head if one at all, you have to imply the flow. For this one to flow better you should combine each sentence together... such as...

Like I Cant Hold My Own,
As If Theyll Get Me Well Exceptionally,
I Cant Let These Fuckas Talk
They Aint Worth Shit Till Tha Death Of Me,

...To...

Like I Can't Hold My Own As If Theyll Get Me Well Exceptionally/
I can't Let These Fuckas Talk They Aint Worth Shit Till Tha Death Of Me/

That give it a better flow.... Uppin this bitch for more replies!...

pz

your rymes are tight thats real. im gonna download that beat now just to see whats up

i agree with what domain said 100% no need to repeat it. just keep working at it you will get better

i pause for like a quick second at every comma..
it flows how yall corrected it along with that beat..

thanks for tha love n respect peace

~Content~

This was aiight... nothing really grabbed my attention though. The concepts are those I've heard a thousand times before. Ya know what I mean? Keep elevatin'... Peace...

Exactly what Domain 9 said ^^^^

This joint was hot, but like all the others said... Also, you got to use better vocab.

im underground and mainstream
I just spit this shit to a beat and without
givin a flyin fuck about vocab
riped it everyone wants to see canibus
in text or sommit...gimme a fuckin break
~I Am Not A Big Fan Of Canibus~
~More Like Jedi Mind Tricks Mf Doom Thelonious Monk
Smut Peddlers Aesop Rock Sage Francis Company Flow
Mr Lif Blackilicious...many more then mainstream
thanks for replies..exactly what noone
that replied said* Peace

~Content~

uppin

Using Alot Of Vocab Is Gay, Why Should Vocab Dominate Over The Main Being Of A Story Be'N Told?

Anyways, Flow Was Consistent, Imagery Was Dope

Jus Didn't Like The Ending, It Sucked And The Verse Had Hardly Any Concept At All But Overall Nice


pZ

i liked the shit am interested in workin with new people with positive attitudes be yourself