Everyday i wake up an think what hell is this,
Oh shit another day of bullshit, is what it is,
Walk out the house brave, never got no fear,
But still i know, danger is there, now this shit aint fair,
People look down on me, come down on me, like a ton,
I can try to resist, many times i have done, but ive never won,
All this, becuase of the colour of my skin,
Ma people feel like they bin fighting forever, when will they win?,
Im sick an tired of this racist nation, no need for discrimination,
But still you want me out, send ma people to termination,
Think we tryna start an invasion?, ya'll fucking wrong,
Use your brains, do tha math, we equal to people, thats the equation,
Tell me why isist, when a white man go on a killing spree, in another country,
Hes not called a teroist?, im just tryna state my views and you call me a racist?,
I dream about this being over with, but still it persist, always gona exsist,
So i try to get away from it, write a rhyme it helps a lil bit,
But turns out to be the same shit,
Cos im brown an tryna rap, i cant rap, not allowed to rap, shouldnt rap,
Im fucking wack?,
tell me what the fuck is that?,
well i put it forth to you now, most peeps cant stand my attack,
One day it'll change, an ya'll gonna be on tha streets, having to watch ya back,
and just coz you white,black,yellow,red,blue you gonna get a smack,
Then you know how it feel, see whats the deal,
An when you there, you gona think to yourself, UhUh shits real?,
You can push me away, ignor what i got to say, hell not even let me in your crew,
Cos im indian, but remember yo, cos of what you are, i hate you,
Now aint that shit true,?
Plus there gonna be a war, an you gotta settle the score?,
You face bomb threats, search me all over, aint i a civilian, aint you got no regrets?,
Got your citys on lock down, check every car that enter the town,
especially the ones that contain us brown,
First of all, we all aint muslim, for what laden did, we all hate him,
Know my friends, your evil will burn, But one day, tha tables will turn,



jus some shit on my mind

Yeah FUCK hate!
Yo man u just letting your emotions out up in here... huh... I could respect that yeah... guess you just didn't care about how your flow, or wordplay was huh... cause it was really choppy, distorted length of bars all over the place... and at times some lines didn't even rhyme... but... your rhymes set a strong messege... something alot of people feel right now... props for that...
I don't know if I should tell you to work on your skills... cause from what I see here it looks like you just keystyled it, tossed it together really quick, to get some stuff off your chest...

Peace man

dis waz respectful,my mans aid it when da wordplay n multis n all dat good shit werent in play but u still seem reletivly new 2 da game,dope message,but got a lil stretched out here n der,disoriented on sum parts,but still pimpin,1

Nice drop fo realz.I can relate to where u speakin from,f@ggots act like they've neva seen a shade otha than white b4.U had sum serious points in there,prolly from experience.Keep postin & Stay ^
-Avi

This was a descent pice, overall..needs work..not much, just those small things that make perfection seem impossible, work on the bar structure, and wordplay a bit more, and you'll be damn near perfect dogg...

Stay spittin....

P.e.a.c.e.

You got your point across well, but the rhyming scheme needs work on, and some of the lines need to be lengthened before the rhyme, to make the flow better:

eg: "Plus there gonna be a war, an you gotta settle the score?,
You face bomb threats, search me all over, aint i a civilian, aint you got no regrets?,"

im feelin u maximus

yeh it threw this 2gether cos i was mad pist at wat im saying in that rhyme at the time

normaly my drops are all in format an flow everything jus pist wen i rote this

ARGH TO MUCH TOGETHORNESS PLAY MY NEW GAME FOR PS2

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"Tell me why isist, when a white man go on a killing spree, in another country,
Hes not called a teroist?"
that was dope... needs work but only a tiny amount... keep rhymin

thanks yo

if i said anything it would just be repeating the shit thats been said, so basicly, it was sick!

crap

yeh yeh crap if u say so

this is so a dumb ass thread please close this somebody