I'm writing a book and I also want to make a song with it. It's basicly composed of the song Crucify by Tori Amos, except I add a beat and my own lyrics to it. Heres the first verse. I'll wait till I finish my book before I finish or record the song.

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Every finger in the room is pointing at me
I wanna spit in there faces, but I'm afraid of what that will bring
I got a bowling ball in my stomach, I got a desert in my mouth
Figures that my courage would choose to sell out now

I've been looking for a savior in these dirty streets
Been looking for a savior beneath these dirty sheets
Raising up my hand, drive another nail in
Just what god needs, one more victim
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Just try and crucify, That is if you wanna die
To be hanged high and dry, and to die in the sky
You didn't find it amusing, when that man was abusing
Your body he was using, and your virginity losing
The sex was not consented, Drugs forced you relented
Your body he tormented, no way you could've prevented
This horribe wrong abuse, There was not any excuse
He did not try and seduce, it was rape he introduced
In your heart there resided, the thoughts that decided
After you two collided, you'd be avenged... plain and simple

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.

i really dont know how to respond to this, this kinda caught me off guard. i aint sayin its bad just kinda preverse. the werid thing is i could kinda see this as a folk song too. either way stay up and keep evolvn

peace

Hmmm...well seeing as it aint completed, i dunno what to say...

...but i guess i'll try...

...your usual trademark of darkness was certainly apparent here...i felt the vivid imagery bought it alive further, along with a solid use of vocab...not too complicated...but not too simple either...

...overall, i feel this it's looking good...but you're going to have to sing it for us, so we can get the 'true' jist of it....(!)...no i mean it, i'd like to hear it sung out like the song it is...

...respect...