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Old 03-08-03, 09:04 PM   #1
Van Ished
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Cold Shoulders

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Approach you from a distance and still feel your cold wind,
no more close friends now it's like you're not important,
you say nothin to me, likewise I do the same,
you could be within arms range, yet no attempt to reach you is made,
allied by friends, yet we are disconnected by personalities,
you too stubborn to realize it and I too reluctant do the repairs,
impair you with my stare, is it a longing or me moving on,
but suddenly you make it clear with a high pitched "hi",
climax ended, the drama is now unfolded,
you sicken me with your presence, so now it is over,
no more will you affect my thoughts, and haunt my soul,
I fold my arms and walk right through your cold/
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Old 03-09-03, 01:11 AM   #2
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nice piece had a good message i found it somthing maybe alotof us can relate to after being hit with a broken relationship with a family memeber or a friend overall great writing holla bak 1
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Old 03-19-03, 10:55 AM   #3
jotoy
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nice...whateva that was
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Old 03-24-03, 02:08 PM   #4
varentao
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Aye, this was an nice piece...

..depicting what x-cution said...even though i thought at times it was akward with certain parts of the structure, line by line....

...but, nonetheless, imagery was solid...and ended it off well...

...respect..
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