chek this and give ur views

me and some friends were smokin dope in the cemy/
after some draws of the shit we were gettin merry/
didnt have no respect for the folks that been buried/
heard voices just thought i was paranoid/
turned out it was cops who we try to avoid/
flashed their lights in our faces cudnt c/
started to panic and decided to flee/
the punks had jumped us unaware/
traces of drugs were everywhere/
didnt look back as i ran as fast as i can/
wanted to avoid gettin a beat down cos im a blak man/
all i heard was the wind rushing by/
mind racin tryin to think of an alibi/
slowed down cos there was people nearby/
turned round to see if i was bein followed/
tryin not to panic, time i'm livin on is borrowed/
walked along the road home thoughts runnin in my dome/
regret leavin a smokin cone hear my ringin fone/
pick up and i see its one of my homies/
start speakin and ask what the low down is/
everything cool cos we all gave the pigs a miss/
lookin back i still cant believe/
why i was sweatin and actin so naive/
all that wuda happenned is we get a warning/
but thats in the past i dont wanna be boring/
now i still smoke and take a toke/
and thats when from my dream i woke

dont sleep on it

Not bad fgee, consisten rhyming and aiight flow, just probably gotta pick up the vocab a little dogg.

Peace Out!!!!

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flashed their lights in our faces cudnt c/
started to panic and decided to flee/
the punks had jumped us unaware/
traces of drugs were everywhere/
didnt look back as i ran as fast as i can/
wanted to avoid gettin a beat down cos im a blak man/

this was iight dawg keep comin wit dem flames.

i know this shit is old but i'm bored what do u think?

aint hatin on it or anythin but its just kinda average. lyrically simple and flow basic. aint bad just not standing out to me. anyway check mine shinobi life aight peace

i know what ur sayin cos i wrote this when i was new

Fgee, nice flow. I liked it.....Nice concept...

Check mine out FUCKEN HATERS in holla back on mine