You’re the angel I fell on, filled with inner beauty,
waiting to be reached from without.
The name of the Good is encrypted
in your hearts’ right chamber… I understood
Since It’s where I hope to reside forever…
I can merely hope you do what’s right
And may I be there with you… when you choose
to disappear, taking away the precious night
it'll fade the stars... you'll attract the light
and draw the attention away from my frozen mind...
glass tears, I'll be in cryostasis... awaiting ice ages
facing my fears eternally... coma... until you'll be back
and bless the gods to the dirt.... and when you ask
to let there be light... Trust me, even the sun can't refuse
it has to obey... for your eyes... your brightness shines
tried to catch your heart... but I'm not much of a fisherman...
Just to let you know... I'm awaiting you, in case of a revelation..
all I need.. is a drink of your presence... and I'll be fed for years

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....aye, been there, maybe even still there...blah!...irony in death is the cruellest thing when you're a chess player in such deep but especially unpredictable waters...ya dig?...(well something like that..er...)..

...anyway, i dunno if i could ever write about this stuff again, i don't tihnk writing can really do it justice (from a personal point of view)...and i just get a huge block of esoteric abyss when i try...

...but pieces can come close...and this was one of them...

...it was a good approach to a topic that some would say is played, and can be very blunt and bemusing....but you added a kind of different depth...using vocab well, imagery too....even though at times on and off..but overall, real nice...

...enough said, respect....

thanks for the feedback varentao

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uppin

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not bad...not really been where you've been..cuz im still a playa...but mos def this was coo...you didnt do too bad wit ya vocab...ya approach to the piece was coo too..exemplifying the angel you came upon...n all that baloney meat...nah mean...elevate ya vocab though

holla

one...hunnet

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RN Vs RB WAR!!....yr 2000...vet~~YEA I SAID VET!! WHAT YOU WANT ME TO PROVE IT? STEP THEN YOU FUCKING HOMO'S