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Old 03-15-03, 03:41 PM   #1
THE DOPED MALB
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Every day that evaporates makes me more krupt/
In realising this my life will definatly come to an abrupt/
End, then I will descend into hell for eternity/
Pain and torment has being persistently learning me/
To hate, the fires of hell will be consistently burning me/
But its deserved I hate so I must terminate/
Myself I must disable my health on this date/
I blame god after all he did create me/
I just pray that he doesn’t reincarnate me/
Im going to say sorry to my family 4 giving up so soon/
All I have done is consume their room so I guess my doom/
Will be a true blessing and right now im confessing/
That im the one that use2 beat myself 4 attention/
My parents said that this is something I shouldn’t mention/
But considering im taking the cowards way out, the deception/
Of others is finally over atleast I contain/
Some dignity, but now my brain/
Is not allowing me 2 remain alive/
So I guess its time 4 me not 2 survive/
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Old 03-15-03, 06:31 PM   #2
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Raw....most definetly raw...

...rawness channelled through a simple rhyming structure...which worked...worked very well actually..

..dunno why...well actually, i guess it was cos of it being so short and precise...and just there....very little subtlety to it...but still, just hits you with emotions that seem kind of personal to the writer....

..enough said...

....respect...
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Old 03-19-03, 11:05 PM   #3
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i like...really
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Old 03-22-03, 11:30 PM   #4
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Wow Malb, this was Dope.

I'd just like to say your peices are always incredibly done and that this is no exception. Keep dropping, if not for me, then for yourself. And if not for yourself, then for joytoy.

~Shalom~
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